Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the table provide imformation about visitors in ashdown museum. showing figures for between two categories.
overall, after that refurbishment recorded the highest figures, while before refurbishment had teh lowest , in addition very satisfied highest to before satisfied refurbishment can be observed across the data .
looking at the first group a , stood at four type sof refurbishment with compared with b . the figure was slightly higer the number of group a , amoung these categories a and b showed the most notable figure.
turning to the data which shows very satisfied is hight then the after refurbishment . and the had satified fighure is lower then before refurbishment and the two categorie are similar very dissatisfied and no response but the other visitor surveys in dissatisfies are rose the before satisfied .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response fails to reach the minimum length requirement of 150 words, standing at only 135 words, which impacts Task Achievement. While the student attempts to summarise the data by mentioning the visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after) and the survey results, the information is communicated very poorly. The text mentions 'the table provide imformation about visitors in ashdown museum' and tries to contrast satisfaction levels, but key figures and categories from the charts are misread, muddled, or left incomplete. For instance, the reference to survey percentages lacks clarity, and important comparisons are obscured by severe language breakdowns. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is highly problematic. The response is divided into short, disjointed paragraphs that lack logical progression and a clear overall structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with phrases like 'overall, after that refurbishment recorded the highest figures' and 'in addition very satisfied highest to before satisfied refurbishment' failing to establish meaningful connections between ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data points or chart segments are being discussed. Paragraphing is superficial and does not help to guide the reader through the summary. These issues place the response firmly in the band 4 range for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is extremely basic, repetitive, and plagued by errors that severely impede communication. The student relies on rudimentary terms like 'figures', 'numbers', 'group', and 'categories' without demonstrating a sufficient range of language for an Academic Task 1. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'imformation' instead of information, 'teh' instead of the, 'amoung' instead of among, and 'hight' instead of higher. Attempts to use less common vocabulary fail due to inappropriate collocation and incorrect word forms, such as 'refurbishment recorded the highest figures' and 'dissatisfies are rose'. Overall, the lexical resource is limited and strains the reader's comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting primarily of flawed simple and fragmented sentences. There is an almost complete absence of accurate complex structures. Grammatical accuracy is very low, with frequent errors in basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Examples include 'the table provide imformation', 'the figures was slightly higer', and 'the had satified fighure is lower then before refurbishment'. Punctuation is also poorly handled, often missing or used incorrectly. These persistent errors cause continuous difficulty for the reader and reflect a weak grasp of English grammar.
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