Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Here the visitors before refurbished were 74000 on the other hand after refurbished is 92000 , which indicates the increasing number.

Moreover we can see on the pie chart that very satisfied visitors numbers are increased to 35 percent before there was only 15 percent . The number of satisfied rates remains unchanged . However we can also see that the number of dissatisfied rates decreased to 15 to 40 also very very dissatisfied rates is decreased to 5 percent .No response remains the same as before.

We can conclude that after refurbished the visitors are more than before refurbished.It is a sign of growth rate. It clearly shows that visitors are more satisfied than past.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the prompt, noting the visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after refurbishment) and mentioning shifts in the survey satisfaction categories, such as the increase in 'very satisfied' respondents to 35 percent. However, there are significant reading errors in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that dissatisfied rates decreased 'to 15 to 40' (whereas dissatisfaction actually fell from 40% to 15%) and misreads the very dissatisfied data. Furthermore, the response falls well short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 116 words. This severely limits the depth of data coverage and development, pulling the score down to a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is divided into four very short paragraphs, which gives some basic visual structure, but overall progression is hindered by choppy sentences and poor linking. Cohesive devices are used minimally or inappropriately, such as 'Here the visitors...' and 'Moreover we can see on the pie chart'. There is an over-reliance on repetitive phrasing ('before refurbished', 'after refurbished') rather than effective referencing or substitution. While the reader can generally follow the broad flow of information from visitor numbers to survey results, the lack of sophisticated cohesive devices and flawed paragraphing keep this criterion at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words directly lifted from the prompt like 'visitors', 'museum', 'refurbished', and 'satisfaction'. There are awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'the increasing number', 'satisfied rates', and 'very very dissatisfied rates'. Less common lexical items are largely absent, and repetitive use of simple terms restricts the range. Although the vocabulary is adequate to convey basic concepts related to the charts, the noticeable errors and lack of lexical variety reflect Band 5.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student uses a limited range of sentence structures, mostly simple or flawed compound sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues throughout the text, such as missing articles ('on the pie chart', 'visitors numbers'), incorrect prepositional usage, and awkward tense/form mixing ('before refurbished' instead of 'before refurbishment'). Complex structures are rarely attempted and when tried, they lack accuracy (e.g., 'which indicates the increasing number'). Errors frequently cause slight hesitation for the reader, aligning this response with a Band 5.0.

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