Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the table presents the number of individuals who tend to visit ashdown museum before and after its restoration.the two bar charts illustrate the result of survey made especially to check wether visitors were satisfied or not during the same two periods. Overall, visitors of the museum tend to increase after the refurbishment and their satisfaction stands out as well.
the ashdown museum were visited by 72.000 visitor before the restoration and only 15% of them were highly satisfied. in addition to then only 10% of them were satisfied.whereas,40% of the visitors expressed their dissatisfaction
and 5% prefered to leave no response.
the case was diffrent after refurbishment, the number of people who visited the museum increased more to reach 92.000 visitor. 35% of the visitors were extremly pleased and 40% of them expressed their satisfaction as well. however, 15% of them were deeply dissatisfied moreover,5% of visitors were dissappinted as well and 5% of them decided to be neutral and not leave any response.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully reports the main features of the visual data, including overall visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after, though slightly misread as 72,000 in the body) and the survey results for satisfaction levels. An overview is provided in the first paragraph, noting the general increase in visitor numbers and satisfaction. However, there are some minor data inaccuracies, such as misreporting the 'satisfied' and 'very satisfied' categories for the first period (stating 15% were highly satisfied and 10% satisfied, whereas the chart shows 15% very satisfied and 30% satisfied). Despite these minor misreadings, the response covers all parts of the task well and highlights key comparisons between the two periods.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged into four paragraphs, providing a coherent overall structure with an introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the before and after periods. However, paragraphing is somewhat irregular, with the introduction and overview merged awkwardly. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'whereas', 'however', and 'in addition to', but some referencing is imprecise or awkward, for instance, 'in addition to then only 10% of them were satisfied'. Logical progression is maintained throughout, but the mechanical nature of some transitions prevents the response from achieving a higher band.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'refurbishment', 'dissatisfaction', and 'extremly pleased'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'wether' instead of 'whether', 'diffrent', 'extremly', and 'dissappinted'. Furthermore, some collocations are unnatural, such as 'decided to be neutral'. While these lexical errors occur frequently, they do not impede communication because the overall meaning remains clear to the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and subordinate structures like 'the number of people who visited the museum increased more to reach 92.000 visitor'. However, grammatical control is weak, with frequent punctuation and capitalization errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ('the table presents...', 'the ashdown museum...'). There are also agreement and pluralization errors, such as '72.000 visitor' and 'the ashdown museum were visited'. These errors reflect a limited control over complex structures and punctuation, though communication is rarely impeded entirely.
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