Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Below chart illustrates the number of visitors, who visited to the Ashdown Museum when it was not renovated and after its renovation. A survay was carried out asking visitors to give their feedback about their experiences before and after the museum renovation.
Overall, the total number of visitors before the refurbishment was at less. However after the refurbishemnt they were more.Additionally to the increase in total number of visitors their feedback also changed in more positive comments. Very satisfied and statisfied feedback result in substantial increase.Whereas, Dissatified and very dissatisfied opinions fell significantly. Visitors who gave No response remained unchanged before and after the renovation.
Prior refurbishment, total number of visitos were 74 thousand and it increased to 92 thousand after the renovation. Similarly, review from the visitors in satisfied and very satisfied section increased from 15 to 35 and 30 to 40 thousand, respectively. In comparison, Dissatisfied and very dissatified reviews were droped from 40 to 15 and 10 to 5 thousands, respectively.While No response comments remained unchaged throughout.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of visitor numbers and survey results while making relevant comparisons. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, contrasting the total visitor figures and the shift towards more positive feedback. Key data points are cited correctly, such as the rise in visitor numbers from 74,000 to 92,000, and the changes in satisfaction categories. However, there are minor inaccuracies in interpreting the survey percentages as exact visitor numbers (e.g., stating satisfied reviews increased from '30 to 40 thousand', whereas the charts show percentages). Overall, the response meets the requirements well.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay is organized into four logical paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'In comparison'. However, referencing and transitional phrases occasionally feel somewhat mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Additionally to the increase' and 'Prior refurbishment'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the specific details, ensuring a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'refurbishment', 'substantially', and 'significantly'. However, there are notable word-choice errors and spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'survay', 'statisfied', 'Dissatified', and 'unchaged'. Collocations are occasionally weak, such as 'feedback result in substantial increase' instead of 'resulted in a substantial increase'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they restrict the lexical score to band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Visitors who gave No response remained unchanged before and after the renovation.' There are several grammatical and punctuation errors, including prepositions and verb forms (e.g., 'visitors, who visited to the Ashdown Museum when it was not renovated', 'visitors before the refurbishment was at less', and 'reviews were droped'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear, and the control of grammar is sufficient to allow easy reading of the text.
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