Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Here,the tabulated foramat and pie chart both are depecting and discusing about the number of visitors who visits ashdown museum during the years before the muesum were as it is and after the restoration of the museum were happend this two period of situation were disccus in this report

given table shows before the refurbishment period it seems that number of visitor were 74,000,here we discuss more the visitors who gave no response and very disasatisfied is on same number 5-10 as equal who is very satisfied they stand on 15 but if anylise about the number of satisfied and the on who were dissatisfied both comperision both stand eqally 30-40

morever after the renovasion were held on the museum the visitors who visit that number are incling to 92,000 even the ratio of people who are satisfied and very satisfied are 35-40 while the number of individual who gave no response and dissatisfied or very dissatisfied collectively stand on 15, and 5-5 here the construction of given anliyser.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the main features of the prompt, mentioning the visitor numbers of 74,000 before refurbishment and 92,000 after, as well as referencing the satisfaction survey data. However, the selection of data is somewhat haphazard and confusingly expressed. For instance, the phrase 'visitors who gave no response and very disasatisfied is on same number 5-10' misinterprets the data figures. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear overview or conclusion summarizing the main trend, which prevents it from achieving a higher band score. It satisfies the basic requirements of addressing the visual data, but the development of ideas is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response suffers severely from a lack of proper paragraphing, written essentially as one long, run-on sentence spanning the entire text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive and awkward transitions such as 'here,the tabulated foramat...' and 'morever after the renovasion were held...'. There is no clear logical progression or structure to guide the reader through the introduction, body data, and overview. While the text attempts to link various survey categories together, the absence of basic punctuation and clear paragraph breaks makes the overall arrangement difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and heavily reliant on words lifted directly from the prompt, such as 'museum', 'refurbishment', and 'visitors'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'depecting', 'discusing', 'muesum', 'happend', 'disasatisfied', 'anylise', 'comperision', 'eqally', 'renovasion', and 'anliyser'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists of poorly structured run-on sentences with a complete absence of standard punctuation and capitalization. There are persistent errors in basic verb tenses and agreements, such as 'number of visitors who visits', 'museum were as it is', and 'restoration of the museum were happend'. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, leading to frequent errors that cause considerable difficulty for the reader.

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