Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the table illustrates the information about visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the after it was refurbished .the charts display the hence of survey asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the some two place
After analyze it can be seen clearly that the visitors during the year before refurbishment almost 74000. however,in guests 15 percent people are very satisfied and then satisfied people was double of very satisfied 30 percent.whilst,the dissatisfied and very dissatisfied visitors before refurbishment approximately 10 percent and 40 percent.while 5 percent tourists are no response.,
On the other hand, the table further collect that after the refurbishment the visitors developed near by 92000. Inaddition, in Museume very satisfied and satisfied people almost 35 percent and 40 percent respectively.whenever,the dissatisfied vistors also decline after the refurbishment only15 percent. the very dissatisfied people almost 5 percent.the no response travelers was the same before and after the refurbishment.
the conclusion,in the museum before the refurbishment highest numbers of the dissatisfied visitors.in other, after the refurbishment dissatisfied also decrease and the highest satisfied travelers also rise.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers from the table and the satisfaction percentages from the charts. Key features are mentioned, such as the total visitor figures increasing from 74,000 to 92,000, and shifts in satisfaction levels like the rise in 'very satisfied' visitors from 15% to 35% and the drop in 'dissatisfied' respondents. However, the data reporting is somewhat fragmented and marred by phrasing errors, such as 'the visitors during the year before refurbishment almost 74000'. Furthermore, the overview attempted in the conclusion is weak and repetitive. While all prompts are touched upon, the lack of precision and under-developed overview places this performance firmly in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into four paragraphs, reflecting a basic attempt at a structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive devices and awkward transitions, such as 'After analyze it can be seen clearly' and 'whenever,the dissatisfied vistors also decline'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak and often mechanical or incorrect. Referencing is unclear in places, making it difficult to follow the relationships between data points. Overall, the cohesive framework aligns with the characteristics of Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'visitors', 'satisfied', 'dissatisfied', and 'refurbishment'. There are frequent errors in word formation, choice, and collocation, such as 'the table further collect', 'in guests 15 percent people', and 'tourists are no response'. Spelling and word-boundary errors are also prevalent throughout the text (e.g., 'Inaddition', 'Museume', 'vistors'). These lexical inadequacies and errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, though the general topic remains discernible, justifying a Band 5 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain significant errors, and attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty or incomplete, such as omitting verbs ('the visitors during the year before refurbishment almost 74000') and faulty prepositional phrases ('in guests 15 percent people'). Punctuation is frequently misused, with missing spaces after commas and periods throughout the response. Grammatical errors are frequent and pervasive, causing noticeable difficulty for the reader and fitting the Band 4.0 descriptor.
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