Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table illustrate the figures of traveler to a museum named as Ashdown during foolowing and earlier year.The information eas restore,and later describe the result of questionor about their satisfication during both duration.

Overall,the travlers show satisfication and happy feelings when they visit the museum later.Because they feel happy and elegant when the museum in better condition.

The number of travlers who went Ashdown museum before year is 74,000. And these tourists are quite less satisfied with envirement.About 40 and 10% people are those who are uncomfertable and dislike the whole musuem.10% people are even not responding.But 30 and 15 visitors are fulfill.

In other contrast,tourists that search out musuem late year are really satisfied and happy.Round about 35 to 40% travlers are feel peaceful and verstile.But at the same time ,there are also searching people who are dissetisfied and feel uncomfertable with envirement and their percentage about 15 to 5.People around 5% even not responding.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the task by mentioning visitor numbers (74,000 and 92,000) and describing some survey results regarding satisfaction levels. However, the data interpretation contains significant inaccuracies and confusion (for instance, misinterpreting percentage categories and mixing up figures, such as stating '30 and 15 visitors are fulfill'). The overview is overly simplistic ('Overall, the travelers show satisfaction and happy feelings... because they feel happy and elegant') and does not effectively summarise the main trends. While the prompt asks for main features and comparisons, the response lacks clear comparative analysis between the two years, resulting in an under-developed task response that meets the minimum word count but falls short on accurate data reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response is divided into paragraphs, which shows some basic structural awareness, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor referencing and unclear cohesive links. Transitions like 'In other contrast' are unnatural and non-standard. The relationships between ideas within sentences are often obscured by awkward phrasing, such as 'Because they feel happy and elegant when the museum in better condition.' Referencing pronouns ('they') lacks clear antecedents at times, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow. There is a lack of smooth cohesion, and paragraphing is mechanically basic rather than functionally clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'traveler to a museum named as Ashdown', 'foolowing and earlier year', 'questionor about their satisfication', 'search out musuem late year'). There are also numerous spelling and morphological errors throughout the text (e.g., 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'satisfication' instead of 'satisfaction', 'uncomfertable', 'musuem', 'dissetisfied'). These lexical inadequacies and errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the precise meaning of the data being discussed, preventing the score from reaching Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple structures with frequent and severe errors. Sentences often lack basic grammatical completeness or agreement (e.g., 'The table illustrate the figures', 'the museum in better condition', 'These tourists are quite less satisfied with envirement', 'People around 5% even not responding'). Subject-verb agreement, verb tenses (mixing past and present haphazardly), and article usage are problematic throughout the text. Punctuation is also erratic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These pervasive errors cause constant difficulty for the reader and significantly impede communication.

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