Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
These pie charts illestrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.
The survey of the year before the refurbishment show that the thirty persent of visitors are dissatisfied for museum.On other hand the year after refurbisment show that only 15 persent of visitors are dissatisfied.the satisfied vistor was 10% before refurbishment but this number decreses to 5% in the survey of year after refurbishment.
The year before refurbishment results also show that "very satisfied" visitors are only 15%.On other hand year after refurbishment the ratio of very satisfied visitors increses to 35%. The persentage of visitors thoso how gave no responce are on still 5%.
Overall, the the visitors after the refurbishment are more satisfied than they was year before the refurbishment.That mean the are happy with refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers some of the main features from the visual data, reporting visitor numbers and survey satisfaction percentages for both periods. However, the student failed to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 139 words. This negative constraint directly impacts task completion. Furthermore, there are several data inaccuracies and omissions; for instance, the student misinterprets the satisfaction categories by stating that the satisfied visitor was 10% before refurbishment, whereas the chart shows 30% for 'satisfied' and 15% for 'very satisfied'. While an overview is attempted at the end, the limited development, data errors, and under-length issue restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into four short paragraphs, representing an attempt at logical organisation. However, the progression is disrupted by mechanical and repetitive transitions such as 'The survey of the year before...' and 'The year before refurbishment results also show...'. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes inaccurate, as seen in the phrase 'On other hand' which appears twice with a spelling error. Referencing is occasionally confusing, and paragraphing is underdeveloped due to the brevity of the response. Overall, the structural framework is present but clumsy, aligning with the Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic vocabulary such as 'numbers', 'visitors', 'museum', and 'refurbishment'. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, including 'illestrates' (illustrates), 'persent' (percent), 'refurbisment' (refurbishment), 'vistor' (visitor), 'decreses' (decreases), 'increses' (increases), 'thoso how' (those who), and 'responce' (response). Word choice is also sometimes unnatural or inaccurate, such as 'dissatisfied for museum' instead of 'dissatisfied with the museum'. Because these lexical errors frequently impede smooth reading, the response falls firmly into Band 4.5, which rounds to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are numerous grammatical and punctuation errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The survey... show', 'the visitors... are more satisfied than they was'), missing articles ('the year after refurbisment show that only 15 persent'), and awkward phrasing ('That mean the are happy with refurbishment'). Punctuation is also faulty in places, such as missing spaces after periods. Due to the high frequency of errors across a limited range of structures, the grammar performance reflects Band 5.
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