Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Given two tables provide information about the Ashdown Museum which visitors visit in the year and after the refurbished and which also shows the result of survey of tourists satisfaction in the same time.
Overall, it can be seen that the after refurbish of Museum the satisfaction of people enhanced and the percentage of dissatisfaction of visitors decreased. While the proportion of visitors with no response were considerably the same in both period.
To begin with, The dissatisfied percentage of visitors were 40% in the before Which decreased upto 25 pecent af
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 92 words and trailing off mid-sentence. Consequently, it only partially addresses the task and lacks a complete overview of the figures, such as the total visitor numbers (74,000 rising to 92,000). While the student correctly identifies some survey trends regarding satisfaction levels, the lack of completion heavily penalises the task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized with basic introductory and body paragraph structures, using cohesive devices such as 'Overall' and 'To begin with'. However, due to the severe under-length nature of the response and the incomplete final sentence, progression is cut short. Referencing is generally clear, but paragraphing and overall cohesion remain underdeveloped as the text breaks off abruptly before fully developing the comparison points.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable inaccuracies and awkward word choices such as 'visitors visit in the year and after the refurbished' and 'satisfaction of people enhanced'. While there are attempts at topic-related terms like 'satisfaction', 'dissatisfaction', and 'proportion', the limited range and frequent lexical errors reflect a Band 5 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. There are several noticeable errors throughout the text, including tense and word-form issues ('the after refurbish of Museum', 'were considerably the same in both period'). Furthermore, the response cuts off mid-sentence ('upto 25 pecent af'), demonstrating poor control and frequent errors that hinder communication.
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