Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table iluustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum after and before the year it was refurbish.The chart demonstrates the outcomes of surveys asked from the visitors that how satisfied they were with their vist if the same two periods.
Overall, the number of visitor after refurbishment of museum is higher then before refurbished and also the numbers of persons who satisfied after refurbished id higher then before refurbished.
Moreover, The number of person they were very satisfied before refurbishment is 15 while after refurbishment were increase the number to 35. The visitors who was satisfied is 30 in before and 40 after the refurbishment and the dissatisfied number peoples is 40 before refurbished and then reduces to 15 after refurbishment.
The number of visitors who were very dissatified before the refurbishment were 10 and reduces to 5 after refurbish. At last the visitors which gives no response is same in before and after refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers the main parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers before and after the refurbishment (74,000 to 92,000) and outlining the survey results across all satisfaction categories. An overview is attempted, noting that visitor numbers and satisfaction levels increased after the refurbishment. However, the data presentation lacks synthesis and reads more like a mechanical listing of individual figures rather than a well-structured summary. For instance, stating 'The number of person they were very satisfied before refurbishment is 15 while after refurbishment were increase the number to 35' captures the data accurately according to the chart, but the overall selection and grouping of data could be more cohesive. Because all main parts are addressed with relevant figures from the visual data, a band score of 5.5 is appropriate.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction, moving to an overview, and providing body details. However, logical progression is hindered by frequent structural and grammatical awkwardness. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'At last the visitors which gives no response', which creates a mechanical and disjointed feel. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks smooth transitions between the overview and the specific survey data points. Referencing is occasionally unclear, which forces the reader to work harder to follow the intended comparisons. This aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors for organisation and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words directly copied or slightly modified from the prompt, such as 'refurbishment', 'visitors', and 'satisfied'. There are numerous word-choice and spelling errors, including 'iluustrates', 'vist', 'persons', and 'dissatified'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the task, but these attempts are marred by inaccurate morphology and collocation. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic statistical information, the frequent errors and restricted range keep the lexical performance at a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies, missing prepositions, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the number of visitor... is higher', 'surveys asked from the visitors that how satisfied they were', 'the dissatisfied number peoples is 40'). Relative clauses and passive structures are handled poorly, such as in 'the visitors which gives no response'. These frequent errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band, making Band 5.0 the most accurate reflection of the grammatical control demonstrated.
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