Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the given table illuistrates the information about visitors satisfaction over the visit to museum during the same two periods one is during the year before refurbishment and the other is during the year after refurbishment so by the given infornation the number of visitors vary in both cases as shown by chart 74000 visitors visit museum before refurbishment while on other hand 92000 visitors visit museum after refurbishment the percentatage of satisfactory vary in both as by observing the pictures a year before refurbishment and a year after refurbiishment shows different percentages of visityors regarding various responses as if we compare both very few percentage of extremly satified peopele is shiown in before refurbishment which is 15% moderate satifaction is around 30% dissatisfied visitors are 40% extremly dissatisfied visitors are 10% and 5% visitors had no response while on other hand in year after refurbishment 35% are extremly satisfied 40% are moderate satisfied 15% are dissatisfied whic is less as in before 5 % are extremly dissatisfied and 5 percent had no response whlie in comparison we concludede that visitors are extremly satisfied in visiting museum after refurbishment

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting both the visitor numbers from the table and the satisfaction percentages from the charts. It provides an overview with relevant comparisons, noting that visitor numbers increased from 74,000 to 92,000 and that overall satisfaction improved after the refurbishment. However, some ideas and details are presented rather broadly and lack deeper extension, placing it firmly at this level. For instance, while the student lists the percentages for both periods (e.g., "15%" extremely satisfied before versus "35%" after), the reporting of trends remains somewhat basic and mechanical without fully integrating the data points into a cohesive narrative. To move higher, the response would need to select and highlight the most striking differences more insightfully and support all main trends with a more polished overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing, appearing as one long, unbroken block of text. Furthermore, there is a total absence of punctuation marks such as full stops and commas, which makes the text run on endlessly and forces the reader to struggle to follow the logical progression of ideas. While the writer attempts to sequence information by moving from the table data to the survey charts and concluding with a comparison, the cohesive devices used are extremely repetitive (relying heavily on phrases like "while on other hand" and "as by observing") and mechanical. To improve, the text must be divided into logical paragraphs and punctuated correctly with sentences that flow naturally, making the relationships between the museum data and survey results clear to the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for communicating basic information about the charts and table, but it features noticeable spelling errors and awkward word choices that reflect a limited range. For example, words like "illuistrates" (illustrates), "infornation" (information), "percentatage" (percentage), "satifaction" (satisfaction), "extremly" (extremely), "peopele" (people), and "concludedede" (concluded) detract from the quality of the writing. While the student attempts less common vocabulary such as "refurbishment" and "dissatisfied", the frequent spelling mistakes and minor lexical inaccuracies occasionally impede smooth communication. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their control of accurate word spelling, improve word formation, and incorporate a wider variety of precise phrasing suitable for academic reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is severely restricted by the complete absence of punctuation, resulting in massive run-on sentences that consist of multiple clauses chained together with conjunctions. Although the student attempts some complex structures, such as comparative clauses introduced by "as if we compare both", these structures are frequently faulty due to the lack of proper boundaries and punctuation. There are also frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as "the number of visitors vary" instead of "varies", and missing articles like "visit museum". These errors and the lack of basic sentence demarcation cause considerable difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate control over basic sentence boundaries, use appropriate punctuation consistently, and employ a clearer mix of accurate simple and complex sentences.

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