Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the two pie charts shows the of visitors that visited to a museum know as Ashdown who went before and after the refurbishment and the chart illustrates the fedback during their visiting during the same two period. Overall it can be seen number of visitors followed an upward trend after the refurbishment of the museum. People were satisfied and more satisfied after added the changes in the museum.

Before the refurbishment took place in museum visitors 15% felt satisfied and 30% visitors were more satisfied respectively. Museum accounted for 40% of disatisfaction about museum. Only 10% of attendees were very disatisfied and 5% did not gave any response.

After the refurbishment the huge change can be observed in which almost double proportion of visitors had very satisfaction. The percentage of satisfied visitors also increased by 10%, while of number of visitors who were disatisfied fell to 15% respectively. Finally number of museum participants who were very disatisfied and did not respond fell to 5% in each. The number of visitors stood at 74,000 before the refurbishment this figure increased to 92,000 after modification.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the prompt by summarising both the visitor numbers table and the satisfaction survey charts. An overview is present, and key features such as the overall upward trend in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels are highlighted. Data is accurately reported, noting the increase from 74,000 to 92,000 visitors and correctly referencing the survey percentages. However, some ideas remain slightly under-developed, particularly in the overview where the explanation of satisfaction changes is basic. To reach a higher level, the response would need to extend and support its comparisons more fully throughout the body paragraphs without relying on repetitive phrasing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to organise information logically, separating the overview, visitor numbers, and survey data into paragraphs. However, the progression between ideas is sometimes mechanical and lacks smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are used repetitively, such as the frequent reliance on 'respectively' used incorrectly or awkwardly at the end of sentences (e.g., 'dissatisfied fell to 15% respectively'). Referencing is also occasionally unclear, and paragraphing could be structured more effectively to group related data points together. To improve, the writer needs to employ a wider range of cohesive devices naturally and ensure clear logical progression from one point to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The writer demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms such as 'upward trend', 'refurbishment', and 'proportion'. Less common vocabulary is attempted, but with noticeable inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word form. For instance, writing 'fedback' instead of 'feedback', 'disatisfied' with a single 's', and awkward phrases like 'very satisfaction' or 'did not gave any response'. These lexical errors do not seriously impede communication, allowing the reader to grasp the core meaning, but they prevent the writing from achieving a higher band. Enhancing precision in word formation and mastering common collocations will elevate the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, such as introductory subordinate clauses ('Before the refurbishment took place...'). There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in museum'), incorrect verb forms ('visited to a museum know as', 'did not gave'), and run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation. While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited control of complex grammatical structures. To progress, the student must focus on reducing basic grammatical slips, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and using proper punctuation for complex sentences.

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