Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
in rhe flow chart we see clearly a big difference between the visitor number who are visits to the Ashdown Museum.
as in the chart circle show the number of different visitor.
firstly we discuss about the visitor who visit before refurbished that are 74000. in which satisfied are just 15% and satisgied have large number in 30% but on the other hand the visitors whos no response that are just 5% and and the persons who dissatisfied are in huge amount.
morever, durning the refurbishment visitors in 93000 in numbers in which satisfied are just 35% that is a god number after refurbishment. same as before refurbished in which same number of no response visitor are 5%.
in conclusion their is a big difference in the amount of the number of the visitor who visit the ashdown museu. results of the visitor satisfaction is clear
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response meets the task only minimally, and importantly, it falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement at 146 words. While the student attempts to summarise the data by mentioning the overall visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 or 93,000 after) and touches upon the satisfaction survey results, the coverage is limited and imprecise. Figures are occasionally misreported, such as stating '93000' instead of 92,000, and percentages are confused with absolute figures or numbers of respondents in a confused manner. Key trends are not fully or accurately developed, and the response lacks a clear, well-supported overview of the main features shown in the mixed charts and table.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
Information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner. The text uses some basic cohesive devices and transition markers such as 'firstly', 'morever', and 'in conclusion', but the overall progression of ideas lacks clarity. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the response essentially lumped into a single block of text with arbitrary line breaks rather than distinct topical paragraphs for the visitor numbers and the survey results. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points correspond to which period or category, resulting in a mechanical and disjointed flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range that struggles to convey the statistical information accurately. There are numerous spelling errors and incorrect word forms throughout the text, such as 'rhe', 'satisgied', 'durning', 'god', and 'museu'. Word choice is frequently inaccurate, for instance using 'chart circle' to describe bar charts or pie charts, and misapplying terms like 'huge amount'. These lexical shortcomings and persistent errors cause strain for the reader and impede clear communication of the visual data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures with frequent faults when attempting more complex clauses. There are persistent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and basic sentence construction, such as 'the visitor number who are visits', 'visitors whos no response', and 'their is a big difference'. Punctuation and article usage are also weak throughout the text. These frequent errors occur across many sentence types and can cause significant difficulty and confusion for the reader in understanding the intended meaning.
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