Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart below illustrates the amount of tourists to Ashdown Museum throughout the year before and the year after it was renovated. the pie chart shows the outcome of attendees how pleased they were with their visit, during the same two durations Overview ;-

the pie chart below shows the number of visitors during the year after significantly increase as compared to the year amount of visitors during the year before

body 01

the percentage of the number of very satisfied visitors to the Ashdown museum has increase to 35% in the year after as compare to the year before where the percentage of very satisfied visitors were 15% as for the percentage of satisfied visitors in the year after is also increase to 40% which was 30% in the year after Aswell as the number of dissatisfied and very Dissatisfied visitors decrease in the year after at 15%% and 5% respectively which was 40% for dissatisfied and 10% for very dissatisfied respectively in in the year before while no response remained constant at 5%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response partially addresses the task by attempting to summarise the main features of the charts, noting the overall increase in visitor numbers and some survey results regarding satisfaction levels. However, the communication of key data is incomplete and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the table data regarding the total number of visitors (74,000 and 92,000) is omitted entirely, and the description of the survey results contains confusion, such as stating 'which was 30% in the year after' when referring to the prior year. Additionally, 18 words copied directly from the prompt were excluded from the official word count. The overview is rudimentary and lacks a fully developed summary of the key trends shown in the visual data, placing this aspect firmly within the boundaries of a partial response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The organisational structure of the response is extremely weak, reflecting a lack of cohesive control. The text is poorly divided with unconventional headings like 'Overview ;-', 'body 01', and erratic line breaks. There is a complete absence of standard paragraphing and logical progression, as the entire body of information is crammed into a single, run-on sentence without proper punctuation or transitions. Referencing is unclear, and cohesive devices are virtually nonexistent or misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To reach a higher standard, the writer needs to group related ideas into distinct paragraphs and utilise appropriate linking words to guide the reader logically through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, though it is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts about the charts. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'significantly increase' and 'respectively', but these attempts are marred by inaccurate word forms (e.g., 'increase' instead of 'increased') and minor lexical errors. There is also confusion in referencing specific survey categories, such as misidentifying chart types by calling the satisfaction charts a 'pie chart' when they are actually bar charts or segmented data. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the overall lexical range restricts the precision and sophistication expected at higher bands. Greater attention to accurate word forms and correct chart terminology is required for improvement.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on a single, extremely long, unpunctuated sentence for the main body. Attempts at complex sentence forms frequently result in faulty structures and run-on errors. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies (e.g., 'has increase' instead of 'had increased'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions or agreement errors (e.g., 'the percentage of very satisfied visitors were' instead of 'was'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing periods and commas creating severe run-on issues that cause difficulty for the reader. Greater control over basic sentence boundaries, verb forms, and punctuation is essential to elevate this aspect.

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