Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table shares information about how often people are visiting to Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment, whereas pie chart illustrates different feedback response of the visitors satisfactory level before and after renovation of museum.

Overall, number of visitors significantly increased after refurbishment of the Ashdown Museum compared to before. The feedback of people before renovation was mostly dissatisfied, which were results to satisfied after redevelopment.

Majorly, 40 number visitors accounted for not satisfied, while 30 visitors were happy by visiting museum, followed by 15 and 10 people were very satisfied and very dissatisfied respectively. However, 5 visitors do not even response for feedback, which were least number along all of them.

Moreover, post refurbishment survey results surprisingly changed drastically toward positive way such as, 40 and 35 number of visitors are satisfied and dissatisfied respectively, which were recorded 30 and 15 earlier. However, dissatisfaction level of visitors reduce by 25 and reaching to15 after new development of museum, followed by 5 people submitted survey as very dissatisfied and no response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by presenting the overall visitor numbers and summarizing the survey results for both periods. However, the information is only partially covered, and the reporting of specific data points is confused. For instance, the numbers and percentages from the charts are misread or awkwardly expressed, such as stating "40 number visitors accounted for not satisfied" and getting mixed up with the categories in the final paragraph where dissatisfied and satisfied figures are incorrectly compared. An overview is attempted, noting the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction, but the lack of accurate detail and minor confusion in data selection prevent the response from achieving a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The text presents a coherent overall arrangement and attempts a logical structure with a clear introduction and an overall summary paragraph. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and referencing is occasionally unclear. Words like "whereas", "Majorly", and "Moreover" are used to signal transitions, but the progression between sentences within paragraphs feels a bit disjointed due to awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is present and separates the introduction, overview, and body details, but the internal organization of the body paragraphs lacks smooth flow, leading to a somewhat repetitive and clunky presentation of the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The lexical range is limited but minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as "refurbishment", "redevelopment", and "significantly increased", but these are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as "how often people are visiting to", "feedback response", and "dissatisfaction level of visitors reduce by 25 and reaching to15". There are also awkward expressions like "satisfied level" and "positive way". While the meaning can generally be understood, these inaccuracies and awkward phrasing restrict the score at this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is a limited range of sentence structures, with frequent errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The writer attempts some complex sentences, but these are often faulty, such as in the opening sentence ("The given table shares information about how often people are visiting... whereas pie chart illustrates...") and in prepositional or verb patterns like "visitors do not even response for feedback" and "were results to satisfied after redevelopment". Errors in article usage, verb tense consistency, and subject-verb agreement are frequent throughout the response, reflecting a heavy reliance on simple structures with persistent inaccuracies when complexity is attempted.

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