Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie charts show the result of surveys in two different periods and asking how satisfied they were and the table give information about the number of visitors in Ashdown Museum.
Overall, the number if dissatisfied and satisfied was very high in year before refurbishment and after refurbishment the amount of very satisfied was boosted in high value. The population of visitors was also rise in big quantity.
Firstly, the number of very dissatisfied was very big 40%, but after it decrease to 15%. The satisfied level was 30% and after it was 40%.
Very satisfied was 15% but after it increased with 35%, the quantity of no response was same in overall period. The very dissatisfied level reduce from 10% to 5%.
Secondly, the figure of visitor was also boost from 74000 to 9200 which was a great success before and after refurbishment.
In conclusion, the charts was very informative.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially, presenting some key features of the charts and table while missing important details or confusing categories. For instance, the student states that 'the number of very dissatisfied was very big 40%, but after it decrease to 15%', whereas the data actually shows that 40% represented 'dissatisfied' in the first period and 'satisfied' in the second. This confusion across survey categories and mixing up of figures limits the clarity of the reporting. Furthermore, the table data is misread or mistranscribed in the text as '74000 to 9200' instead of 92,000 visitors. While an overview is attempted, the ideas remain limited and under-developed, meaning the response does not yet present a fully clear picture of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation evident in the structure, with basic paragraph divisions and transition markers such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion'. However, there is no clear overall progression across the text, and the logical flow is disrupted by inaccuracies in data interpretation. Cohesive devices are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately, and referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen when pronouns or comparative phrases do not clearly point back to the intended data points. Paragraphing is present, but grouping of information is disjointed, jumping between satisfaction levels and visitor numbers without a smooth overarching narrative.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of visitors and survey results. The writer attempts some topic-specific and dynamic vocabulary, such as 'refurbished', 'boosted', and 'quantity', but noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form occur throughout. Examples include phrases like 'in high value', 'in big quantity', and 'the satisfied level', which sound unnatural and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader in grasping the exact intended meaning. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the overall lexical range restricts precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside a few awkward attempts at complex or passive forms, such as 'surveys in two different periods and asking how satisfied they were'. There are frequent grammatical errors involving subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the table give', 'the charts was'), missing articles (e.g., 'in year before'), incorrect prepositions, and faulty verb tenses. These frequent errors persist across most sentences and can cause difficulty and strain for the reader.
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