Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The figures below illustrate the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was redeveloped. The given informations highlight the result of survays asking visitors how satisfied they weree with their visit , during the same periods.

Overall,after refurbishment,the number of people who are very satisfied increased while public who are very dissatisfied decrease in higher amount.During the time,visitiors who gave no response remained same.

Taking about year before redevelopment,74000 people visited museum where 15% were very satisfied and just dissatisfied public was 40%.However these data changes after redevelopment because the number of people who found museum great rose up to 35% alongside,number of public who were very unhappy fall and become 15%. Through the period people who were not interested and gave no response remained same in both year.

On the other hand visitors who were very dissatisfied before refurbishment were just 30% but in increased by 10% after reorganization. Public who were just satisfied where15% before, and 35%after restructured.The number of people who visited the year after refurbishment was 92000 surprasing the number of people visited before redevelopment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, presenting some key features of the museum data but containing noticeable inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that 'dissatisfied public was 40%' for the year before refurbishment, which is correct for dissatisfied, but later confuses categories by claiming that visitors who were 'very dissatisfied before refurbishment were just 30% but in increased by 10% after reorganization.' Furthermore, some ideas are repetitive and under-developed, lacking a fully clear overview of the main trends across both the visitor numbers and the satisfaction surveys. To move towards higher bands, the writer must ensure that all reported data points precisely match the source material and that comparisons are clearly structured and fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation in the response, but it lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, with an introductory and a concluding overview structure, but the body paragraphs are disjointed and repeat similar points about satisfaction levels without a logical flow. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inaccurately, such as abrupt transitions ('Taking about year before redevelopment', 'On the other hand') and vague referencing ('these data changes', 'Through the period'). To improve, the student should ensure each paragraph has a distinct focus, employ cohesive ties more naturally to link sentences and ideas, and maintain a logical chronological or thematic progression throughout the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and spelling that occasionally cause confusion for the reader, such as 'survays', 'weree', 'visitiors', 'redevelopment', and 'surprasing'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'reorganization' and 'restructured', but these are accompanied by awkward phrasings or incorrect word forms. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to expand their lexical range with accurate spelling and appropriate collocations, avoiding repetitive terms and ensuring that word forms (nouns, adjectives, verbs) are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing shows a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors when attempting complex forms. There are frequent mistakes in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'The given informations highlight', 'people who visited museum where 15%', 'number of public who were very unhappy fall', and 'in both year'. Punctuation errors are also present, including missing spaces after commas and periods. These frequent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score. To progress, the writer should focus on mastering basic grammatical structures, ensuring correct tense consistency when describing past data, and improving sentence control.

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