Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given table chart illustrates how many individuls visit to Ashdown Museum and pie charts depicts the satisfaction level of visitors after and before refurbishment of museum.

Overall, it is crystle clear that highest number of people visit after the refubishment who were satisfied but maximum pupils were dissatisfied before doing it moderate.

To fleeting glance, during the year before refurbishment 74,000 visiters were visit at Ashdown museum whereas the majority of tourists had gone after the reconstuction which was accounted at 92,000.

moving ahead, the dissatisfifed and very dissatisfied masses noted at similar level in the case of visiting after and before rennovation of museum which was between under 30- 40. moreover, miner difference had been recorded in after completion of work by 5% while 5% people had no responce in both years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response only partially addresses the task requirements. While the student attempts to present the main data points, such as the visitor numbers (74,000 and 92,000) and general satisfaction levels, the overview is extremely vague and confused, referring to 'moderate' satisfaction without clear reference to the charts. Furthermore, important details are misreported or obscured by faulty expression, such as the claim about dissatisfied masses. Additionally, the length requirement is not met, as the response falls short of the 150-word minimum by 16 words. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to ensure all parts of the prompt are covered clearly and accurately with a well-defined overview, while meeting the minimum word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation with basic attempts at paragraphing and linking phrases, such as 'Overall,' and 'moving ahead,'. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the transitions between sentences feel disjointed and mechanical. Referencing and cohesive devices are inadequate or inaccurate, making the flow difficult to follow at times. For example, expressions like 'To fleeting glance' are unnatural and fail to guide the reader logically through the comparisons. To improve, the writer should use standard, accurate cohesive devices and ensure that each sentence logically follows from the previous one to build a coherent comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word formation that cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'individuls', 'crystle', 'refubishment', 'visiters', 'reconstuction', 'dissatisfifed', 'rennovation', 'miner', and 'responce'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but these frequent lexical inaccuracies and misspellings impede communication. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their vocabulary range and pay close attention to accurate spelling and word forms appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences or faulty complex structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb forms and tenses (e.g., 'how many individuls visit to Ashdown Museum', '74,000 visiters were visit'), subject-verb agreement, and articles. These errors occur frequently and can cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate better control over basic grammatical structures, ensure correct verb tenses are used when describing past data, and reduce the frequency of structural errors.

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