Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table and two pie chart compare the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum and the result of survey asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods.

Overall, during the year after refurbushment have visited higest visitors and in that time most of the people are very satisfied by the result. Followed by, during the year before refurbishment was the lowest proportion in this period most of the visitor are dissatisfied by the museum.

The highest proportion was the year after refurbishment were 92000 tourist visted to the museum. In there the highest proportion was very satisfied category which accounted for 40% , like whise second highest accounted for 35% that are satisfied tourist and dissatisfied, very dissatified and no response visitor are most lest result 15%, 5% and 5% respectivily.

The year befor refurbishment was smallest proportion which accounted for 74000 visitor. The most of visitor was dissatisfied by the museum which accounted for 40% the higest proprtion and the very disatified, very satisfied and no response survey are most lest proportion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers and surveying results for both periods, meeting the criteria for a solid performance. However, some aspects are more fully developed than others. For example, while the overall visitor numbers and satisfaction percentages are mentioned, the explanation of the survey results contains inaccurate figures, such as stating that 'very satisfied' accounted for 40% in the year after refurbishment when the chart shows 35%, and confusing the categories for the year before refurbishment. The overview attempts to capture the main trends, noting higher visitor numbers and increased satisfaction after the refurbishment, but it lacks precision. To reach a higher level, all data points must be accurately transcribed and supported without confusion between the two survey categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement with a logical attempt to divide information into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing each year. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty and mechanical. The writer relies heavily on repetitive transitional phrases such as 'The highest proportion was' and 'The year before refurbishment was', which restricts natural progression. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with phrases like 'In there' and 'most lest result'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks smooth transitions between sentences. To improve cohesion, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensure that referencing clearly points back to the correct data without mechanical repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, demonstrating an attempt to discuss percentages, visitor numbers, and satisfaction levels. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that reflect a limited range, such as 'refurbushment', 'higest', 'whise', 'dissatified', 'respectivily', and 'lest'. The writer attempts less common vocabulary like 'proportion' and 'category', but these are often used inaccurately or repetitively. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the response from achieving a higher band. To improve lexical resource, the student should focus on accurate spelling, correct word forms, and expanding the variety of descriptive adjectives and adverbs to discuss statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'The table and two pie chart compare...' and relative clauses or comparative structures, though control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions within grammatical patterns, including 'chart compare' instead of 'charts compare', 'most of the visitor are dissatisfied', and 'tourist visted to the museum'. Punctuation is also basic, with missing commas in lists and compound sentences. These errors reflect a limited grammatical control where attempts at complex structures frequently introduce mistakes. To improve, the writer needs to focus on basic agreement, correct verb tenses for describing past data, and reducing errors in simple sentence frames.

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