Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit.
It clear of the proportion total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum discuss surveys of visitors satisfaction and year before refurbishment, very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfield, very dissatified, no response.
Looking at the table below shows, discuss of the year before refurbishment. The dissatisfied largest proportion 30. The figure smallest proportion 15, While the considerably satisfied 10. The figure very dissatisfied 40.
Looking at the end table show, the discuss total numbers of visitors year before refurbishment 74,000, and during the year after refurbishment 92,000. The figure lowest proportion response 5, the bottomed out very dissatisfied 40, the figure reached dissatisfied 15, and peaked up satisfied 5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, containing only 106 words in total, with 38 of those being copied directly from the prompt. Furthermore, the content fails to properly summarise the visual data, instead listing fragmented and inaccurate data points (e.g., misinterpreting the satisfaction survey figures completely). There is no clear overview, and key features such as the visitor number increase from 74,000 to 92,000 are poorly contextualised. To improve, the student must write at least 150 words, avoid copying the prompt, and systematically report the main trends and data points from both the table and the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The text lacks logical organisation and clear progression. Ideas are presented in fragmented, isolated sentences rather than cohesive paragraphs. There is an over-reliance on repetitive framing phrases such as 'Looking at the table below shows' and 'The figure', which impedes the flow of information. Pronoun referencing and cohesive devices are largely misused or absent, making the text difficult to follow. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to group related data logically, use standard paragraphing, and employ appropriate cohesive links to connect sentences and ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and frequently misused. Words like 'dissatisfield', 'dissatified', and 'discuss' show issues with spelling and word formation. Statistical terms such as 'proportion', 'peaked up', and 'bottomed out' are incorrectly applied to random data values, demonstrating a lack of control over topic-specific vocabulary. To improve, the student should expand their range of descriptive vocabulary for data trends—such as verbs and adjectives describing increases and decreases—and check word forms and spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response contains severe and frequent grammatical errors that constantly impede communication. There are major structural breakdowns, such as incomplete clauses ('It clear of the proportion...'), missing verbs, and incorrect grammatical patterns. Simple sentence attempts are heavily flawed, and there is no control over complex structures. Articles, prepositions, and word order are frequently mishandled. To progress, the writer needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence contains a clear subject and verb, and systematically reducing the frequency of foundational grammatical errors.
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