Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table shows the numbers of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The pie chart shows the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

In the first table we can see the total number of visitors who visit ashdown museum during before and after refurbishment . 74000 people visits before the refurbishment and 92000 people visits after the refurbishment.

Here, in the pie chart we can see the results of surveys satisfaction during before and after

refurbishment.Before the refurbishment mostly people dissatisfied around 40% also 30% people is satisfied.10% people very dissatisfied from before refurbishment. 15%people is very satisfied and 5% people give no response to before refurbishment.The second pie chart is about the after refurbishment. Here, we can see mostly people satisfied around 40% and 15% people is dissatisfied. Big amount of people is very satisfied around 35% and 5% people don't give response and also very dissatisfied.

In conclusion, we can say that the mostly people visit after refurbishment of ashdown museum. In pie chat we can say that the before refurbishment mostly people dissatisfied and after refurbishment mostly people satisfied

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the task partially. The writer successfully reports the key table figures (74,000 visitors before and 92,000 after) and attempts to summarize the survey data from the charts. However, the explanation of the survey results contains inaccurate figures and lacks clarity, such as stating that 'mostly people dissatisfied around 40%' instead of correctly linking the data to the specific categories of satisfaction and dissatisfaction. Furthermore, capitalization is ignored for proper nouns like 'ashdown museum', and some parts of the overview are repetitive. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to select and report data more accurately without misinterpreting proportions and ensure that all key features—such as the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction—are fully and clearly developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organization evident in how the text is broken down into an introduction, body paragraphs for the table and charts, and a conclusion, but there is no clear overall progression throughout the piece. The writing relies heavily on repetitive transitional phrases like 'Here, in the pie chart we can see' and 'The second pie chart is about'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Paragraphing is attempted, but grouping sentences logically is hindered by weak referencing and abrupt shifts between ideas. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer should use a wider variety of appropriate cohesive links to show relationships between ideas, ensure referencing is clear, and structure each paragraph around a distinct, logically developed theme.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer relies on basic and repetitive terms such as 'people', 'visit', 'satisfied', and 'dissatisfied' throughout the response. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as '74000 people visits' (incorrect word form) and 'don't give response' instead of 'no response'. Spelling errors also occur, notably 'chat' instead of 'chart' and the failure to capitalize 'ashdown museum'. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range by incorporating less common vocabulary, precise synonyms for describing data trends (e.g., proportions, percentages, majority), and accurate collocations related to statistical reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex or compound structures that are faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'mostly people dissatisfied around 40% also 30% people is satisfied' and missing verbs or prepositions. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods and commas, and sentences running together. To progress to a higher band, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of grammatical structures, improve control over tense and agreement, and reduce basic errors by ensuring every sentence contains a clear subject and predicate.

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