Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The table and pie chart illustrate the number of visitors to Ashdown museum in two consecutive years before and after refurbishment and the conclusion of surveys regarding the visitors satisfaction.

Overall, after refurbishment the number of visitors increased dramatically as compared to the year before. Similarly, the satisfaction level of visitors also surged the year after refurbishment.

Initially, before renovation, there were 74000 tourists but the number increased significantly to 92000 after the restoration of the museum the year after.

After reviewing the satisfaction level of the visitors in those two years, there was alot of difference in both years. 5% of the tourists gave no response in both years, but the dissatisfied visitors percentage decreased drastically from 40% to 15% in the next year. Moreover, very dissatisfied percentage also declined from 10% to 5%. In the first year, only 15% tourists were very satisfied but that figure climbed to 35% in the year after restoration.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main overall changes accurately: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction improved, with dissatisfaction falling. The figures you give for no response, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied and very satisfied match the charts. This covers the key trends and supports your overview. However, the account is not fully balanced: you omit the increase in the “satisfied” group from 30% to 40%, an important positive change, and the survey results are described less completely than the visitor totals. Also, “increased dramatically” and “surged” slightly overstate the changes. Include the missing category and use measured language to make the report more precise and fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall sequence: an introduction, a summary of the main trends, visitor totals, and then survey findings. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Similarly,” “Moreover” and “but” help show relationships between points, and the reader can follow the comparisons. The organisation is coherent, though the final paragraph groups several survey categories together without covering the full set, so the progression feels somewhat incomplete. Some transitions, particularly “After reviewing the satisfaction level,” are less direct than necessary and make the report sound like a process description. Group the positive responses together, then the negative responses, and use concise links to guide the reader through those comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing change, including “increased significantly,” “decreased drastically” and “climbed.” These choices make the main trends clear, and “refurbishment” and “restoration” show some variation. However, several expressions are imprecise or repetitive: “the conclusion of surveys” does not naturally describe survey results, and “alot of difference” is informal and awkward. “Tourists” is also less accurate than “visitors” for this chart. Some trend words, such as “dramatically” and “surged,” are stronger than the data warrants. Aim for precise chart-reporting collocations and a more neutral register; this would improve flexibility and control without sacrificing clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “5% … in both years, but the dissatisfied visitors percentage decreased” and the time clause “after the restoration … the year after.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparisons, and errors do not prevent understanding. Some grammatical control is still uneven. For example, “the visitors satisfaction” needs a possessive form or a noun phrase such as “visitor satisfaction,” while “very dissatisfied percentage” lacks a clear grammatical head. The opening sentence also has a long, awkward structure that makes the relationship between the table and charts less clear. Use consistent noun phrases and check possessives, articles and sentence construction when revising.

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