Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table and pie charts illustrates the hoe many visitors visited and satisfied or not during the year before and after referbishment.

Overall, after the refurbishment the number of people who visited the museum that wes incresed and almost visitors satisfied. In the case of dissatifaction befor the refurbishment the ratio was almost half.

To begin with , in the table , due to same year but before refurbishment atleast three quter visitors visited the museum , however 92000 people

visited the museum after the refurbishment which was one fifth percentage higher then visitors who wares visited before the refurbishment.

Futher more, in pie charts year before the refurbishment only 15 percentage people were very setisfied as compare to after refurbishment which was one fifth percentage less. In case of satisfied visitors were 30 percantage before refurbishmment , which were incresed by 10 percentage year of after refurbishment. before refurbishment 40 %dissatifacton and 10% very dissatifaction visitors

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall direction: visitor numbers rose after refurbishment, and satisfaction improved. You also include several relevant figures, such as 74,000 before and 92,000 after, and the 40% dissatisfied figure before refurbishment. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the increase from 74,000 to 92,000 is not one fifth, and the statement that very satisfied visitors after refurbishment were “one fifth percentage less” reverses the trend; the figure rose from 15% to 35%. The account also stops before reporting key after-refurbishment categories, including 15% dissatisfied and 5% very dissatisfied, and does not clearly summarise the unchanged 5% no-response share. Select the main contrasts accurately and complete the comparison of both periods.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and a paragraph beginning “To begin with,” followed by further chart details. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is difficult to follow because the final paragraph combines several figures without completing the comparisons, and the response ends abruptly after “10% very dissatisfaction visitors.” Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “To begin with” and “Furthermore” are present, but some are used mechanically or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. Group the visitor totals together, then compare satisfaction categories across the two years, using clear references such as “before refurbishment” and “after refurbishment” consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt relevant chart vocabulary, including “visitors,” “refurbishment,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfaction” and “percentage,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and frequent spelling and word-choice problems make parts difficult to interpret: “hoe many,” “referbishment,” “incresed” and “setisfied” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “the ratio was almost half” and “one fifth percentage higher.” Use standard data-reporting collocations and distinguish clearly between a percentage and a percentage-point change. More accurate spelling and a wider set of terms for increases, decreases and proportions would make the description clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “however.” Nevertheless, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the intended relationships unclear. For example, “The table and pie charts illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the number of people who visited the museum that wes incresed” does not form a clear grammatical clause. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “in pie charts year before” and the final fragment beginning “before refurbishment 40%.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation. Short, accurate comparisons are preferable to longer sentences whose structure obscures the data.

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