Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table indicates the total numbers of abroad visitors to ashdown museum during and after the year when it was renewed again.

The diaghram illustrates the result of surveys asking visitors how much they were satisfied among those two same periods.

Overall, the most visitors are very satisfied aftrer refurbishment and many are not satisfied.one part remains unchanged and it is no response.

Firstly, the total number of peoples coming around the world to visit ashdown museum when construction is incomplete are 74000 visitors visit that place. in that year a lot of people are satisfied 30% and in contrast 15% are only for very satisfied visitors, in other hand, after the whole work is done and it can clearly sean that around 18000 people increases in that phase however in thet phase it double for very satisefied visitors around 35% its the most highest in that year futhermore, satisfied people also rises to 40 percentage to 30 %.

In the upcoming year of refurbishment, dissatisfied customers percentage is 40% in the early year and after completion it decreased to 15%. very dissatisfied visitors 10 % decline to 5 % after refurbishment but the one remain constant and it is no respone visitors it's only 5%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both the visitor total and the satisfaction surveys, and several figures are accurate: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, satisfaction increased from 30% to 40%, and dissatisfaction fell from 40% to 15%. You also note that no response remained at 5%. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “the most visitors are very satisfied” does not describe the overall result, since the largest group after refurbishment was satisfied (40%), not very satisfied (35%). The phrase “many are not satisfied” also obscures the substantial fall in dissatisfaction. Some comparisons are difficult to follow, including the claim that very satisfied visitors “double” when the figure rose from 15% to 35%. State the main trends clearly, then report the figures precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an opening, an attempted overview and paragraphs containing comparisons, so the reader can identify the two periods being discussed. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the final paragraph returns to dissatisfaction after the previous paragraph has already moved between visitor totals and satisfaction categories. Long, loosely connected sentences, especially the one beginning “Firstly, the total number…”, make it hard to distinguish the figures and comparisons. Linking phrases such as “in contrast,” “in other hand,” and “furthermore” are sometimes used inaccurately or without a clear relationship between ideas. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use shorter sentences with precise references to each year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing change, including “increased,” “decreased,” “remains unchanged,” and “after completion.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the report difficult to read. For example, “abroad visitors” and “peoples coming around the world” are not natural ways to describe museum visitors, while “the most highest” is an incorrect form. Spelling errors such as “diaghram,” “aftrer,” “satisefied,” and “respone” are noticeable and reduce clarity. Choose standard chart-reporting language and check spelling carefully; accurate phrases such as “visitor numbers,” “the proportion of satisfied visitors,” and “fell to” would make the comparisons more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to combine ideas using clauses and comparison structures, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “the total number … are 74000 visitors visit that place” has problems with subject–verb agreement and sentence construction, while “it double for very satisfied visitors” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. Tense and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “dissatisfied customers percentage is 40% in the early year and after completion it decreased.” Missing capital letters and full stops further affect accuracy. Use a reliable past-tense pattern for both periods, such as “The proportion of dissatisfied visitors fell from 40% to 15%,” and check agreement, articles and punctuation in each sentence.

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