Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Meseum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts illustrates the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were woth their visit, during the same two periods.

Overall the number of visitors increased after the Renovation of Museum.Before the Rebuilt half percentage of people are dissatisfied from the museum but year after the renovation proportion of people which are satisfied from the museum increased dramatically.

During the year before refurbishment 74000 people visited museum and 50% of them were dissatisfied from museum.Morevover 45 percent were satisfied and 5 % gave no response.

Afterwards during the year after renovation 92000 people visited the museum. 35% of people were very satisfied , 40 % people were satisfied 15% were dissatisfied.Additionaly 5 % of people were very dissatisfied and 5% did not give any response about thier visit to museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction improved after refurbishment. You also report several survey figures accurately, including 35% very satisfied and 40% satisfied afterwards. However, the before-refurbishment figures are misrepresented: 40% were dissatisfied and 10% very dissatisfied, rather than 50% being dissatisfied; 45% were not satisfied, not satisfied in the positive sense. The overview would be clearer if it highlighted the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction and distinguished the two negative categories. The response is also below the required 150 words, which limits the detail and development of the summary. Check each category against the chart and add a concise comparison of the main changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and details for the two periods. This helps the reader follow the basic comparison. However, progression is limited because the figures are mostly listed period by period rather than compared directly, and some linking words are awkward or repetitive, such as “Moreover,” “Afterwards,” and “Additionally.” The overview also combines several ideas in a sentence that is difficult to follow. Use clearer paragraphing and connect related changes—for example, contrast the fall in dissatisfaction with the rise in satisfaction after refurbishment. More precise referencing and a logical comparison of the categories would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfied,” and “proportion,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy: “Meseum,” “woth,” “Morevover,” “Additionaly,” and “thier.” Phrases such as “dissatisfied from the museum” and “gave any response about their visit” are not natural collocations. Repeating “people” and “museum” also makes the description less precise. Aim to use standard chart language consistently, such as “visitors,” “accounted for,” and “reported satisfaction,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would improve clarity without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main message can usually be understood. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “The charts illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “during the year before refurbishment 74000 people visited museum” needs clearer punctuation and an article before “museum.” The overview sentence beginning “Before the Rebuilt half percentage…” is difficult to interpret because its structure is faulty. Several sentences also run together without spaces after full stops. Practise accurate sentence patterns such as “The proportion of dissatisfied visitors fell from…” and proofread agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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