Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table below demonstrates the number of people who visited the Ashdown Museum before and after renovation. The charts illustrate the findings of surveys asking the visitors that how satisfy they were during their visit, in the same two periods.

Overall, the results indicated some major differences with the satisfaction level of the visitors as majority of the citizens were more satisfied after the renovation of the museum.

There was a total of 74,000 people during the year before refurbishment, however 92,000 after. The result of the survey shows the percentages of residents in the year before and the year after it was modified. The percentage of those who were very satisfied is 15% before and climbed steadily to 35% after refurbishment. However, 30% of city residents showed satisfactory results before while 40% after reconstruction.

The percentage of visitors who were dissatisfied was higher before but decreased after refurbishment. Furthermore, those who were very dissatisfied indicated with minimal differences. Additionally, 5% visitor's findings showed no response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main elements by reporting the visitor totals and comparing several satisfaction categories. The overview correctly identifies that satisfaction improved after refurbishment, and the figures for visitors (74,000 and 92,000), very satisfied (15% and 35%), and satisfied (30% and 40%) are accurate. However, some important details are under-developed: the dissatisfied share fell from 40% to 15%, while the very dissatisfied share fell from 10% to 5%; saying these showed “minimal differences” is vague. The no-response figure remained at 5% in both periods, but this is not made explicit. Also, “citizens” and “residents” are not what the charts measure; they refer to museum visitors. A clearer overview and fuller reporting of the remaining categories would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs presenting the visitor totals and survey results. The main comparisons are generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships. Some connections are less effective or repetitive, though. “However” introduces the increase in satisfied visitors even though it is not a contrast with the preceding figure, and “Additionally” begins a final point without clearly linking it to the unchanged no-response result. The final paragraph also groups two categories without giving their figures, which weakens progression. Organising the survey results into clear comparisons—positive responses, negative responses, and no response—would make the cohesion more precise and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction level,” “percentage,” and “decreased,” so the data is usually understandable. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for this chart. “Citizens” and “city residents” incorrectly suggest the survey respondents were residents rather than visitors, while “satisfactory results” does not clearly describe the proportion who were satisfied. “The findings of surveys asking the visitors that how satisfy they were” is also awkwardly phrased, and “indicated with minimal differences” is not a natural way to report a change. Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations, such as “the proportion of visitors who were dissatisfied fell.” This would improve clarity and control without requiring unnecessarily elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast with “however” and a relative clause in “those who were very dissatisfied.” Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions reduce accuracy. For example, “asking the visitors that how satisfy they were” has an incorrect clause structure and word form; write “asking visitors how satisfied they were.” In “There was a total of 74,000 people … however 92,000 after,” the second part lacks a complete verb phrase; use “compared with 92,000 after refurbishment.” The phrase “5% visitor’s findings” also has an incorrect plural/possessive construction. More consistently complete clauses and accurate question clauses would improve control.

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