Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The peovided table depicts the amount of visitors visited of Ashdown Museum as well as pie chart shows the result of feedback of visitor experince before and after refurnishment.

Overall, it is clear that

After observing table, 74,000 of tourist visted Ashdown Museum before the year of development, after the construction there are 92,000 of people visited this museum. Also, after refubrishment there a sugnificant growth in travelers.

Turning to pie charts, year before constructed, 40% of people are dissatisfied, this was the highest catagory on this chart, while 5 % of visitor not showed their response. 30%, 15% and 10% of citizens are satishfied, very satisfied and very dissatisfied respectively. Furthermore, after refurbishment, satisfied of people increased by 10% and reached at 40%, whereas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main subject and report several relevant figures, including the rise in visitors from 74,000 to 92,000 and the before-refurbishment satisfaction percentages. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the overview is left unfinished (“Overall, it is clear that”), and the after-refurbishment survey is cut off after noting that satisfaction reached 40%. Important changes—such as very satisfied rising to 35% and dissatisfied falling to 15%—are therefore not reported. The response also falls 25 words short of the required minimum, limiting the detail available. Complete the overview and compare the main shifts in both charts, rather than leaving the final comparison unfinished.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with an introduction, attempts an overview, and then separates the visitor figures from the survey details. Phrases such as “Turning to pie charts” help signal a change of focus. However, progression is weakened by the incomplete overview and the final sentence ending with “whereas,” which leaves the comparison unfinished. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, as in “After observing table,” and the sequence of satisfaction figures is difficult to follow. Use complete paragraphs with a clear overview followed by a systematic comparison of before and after results. Linking expressions should connect finished ideas, not introduce clauses that are left incomplete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” “increased,” and “reached,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, for example “peovided,” “visted,” “refubrishment,” and “catagory.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “the amount of visitors visited” and “citizens” do not fit this context well. Prefer accurate chart language such as “the number of visitors,” “respondents,” and “proportion.” Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations would make the information easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer structures, including a comparison with “while” and a sentence using “whereas,” but the range remains limited and the longer constructions are not consistently controlled. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms appear in phrases such as “the amount of visitors visited” and “40% of people are dissatisfied,” where the past survey period calls for past-tense reporting. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “after the construction there are 92,000 of people visited” combines incompatible patterns. Use straightforward, complete sentences and check tense, articles, and the structure after reporting verbs. Ensure each comparison has a complete main clause.

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