Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The result of the survey in Ashdown museum depicts the number of visitors visited after the museum were refurbished was higher than before the refurbishment.

The chart also gives the response of the the spectators about the refurbishment of how they satisfied.

The chart survey result says that there were more visitors who were in category of very satisfied after the refurbishment than before.

In the section of satisfied too there were more spectators after refurbishment than before.

The survey denotes the people who were dissatisfied was lesser which is after the refurbishment than before.

The people who were in the category of very dissatisfied was more in before refurbishment than after

The people remain exact in number who did not respond portion before and after refurbishment

The renovation of the Ashdown museum was clearly depicts there were stark increase in the foot fall of visitors from 74 k to 92k

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall changes accurately: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, positive satisfaction increased, and dissatisfaction declined. The comparisons between the two survey periods are generally grounded in the data, including the unchanged 5% who gave no response. This addresses the task, but some features are less fully reported than others: you do not give the survey percentages, so the scale of the changes is unclear, and there is no concise overview that brings the main trends together. Also, the opening sentence confuses the number of visitors with survey results. Include key figures—for example, very satisfied visitors rose from 15% to 35%—and distinguish clearly between visitor totals and satisfaction ratings.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a broadly sensible order, moving from visitor numbers to the satisfaction categories, and the repeated before-and-after comparisons help readers understand the intended contrasts. However, the ideas are presented as a series of separate statements rather than as a clearly organised summary. There is no distinct overview, and several sentences begin with repetitive phrases such as “The chart” or “The people,” which makes progression feel mechanical. Some references are also unclear, particularly “which is after the refurbishment than before.” Group the positive ratings together, then the negative ratings, and use clear linking expressions such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile.” A short introduction, overview, and two organised detail paragraphs would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” and “category,” and the reader can generally identify the comparisons you intend. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive. “Spectators” is not appropriate for museum visitors, “the response of the the spectators” is awkward, and “foot fall” is not the natural expression for visitor numbers. “Stark increase” is an attempt at more precise language, but it is not supported by a clear numerical comparison in the sentence. Use standard chart vocabulary consistently, such as “visitors,” “proportion,” “rose,” and “fell,” and report percentages where relevant. This would improve precision while retaining an appropriate academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your response includes several simple comparative structures, such as “there were more visitors” and “was lesser … than before,” and the intended meaning is usually recoverable. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in agreement, articles, and clause construction recur. For example, “the museum were refurbished” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “The renovation … was clearly depicts” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “The people who were dissatisfied was lesser” also has agreement and comparative-structure problems. Practise accurate patterns such as “The proportion of dissatisfied visitors fell from 40% to 15%” and “Visitor numbers increased from 74,000 to 92,000.” More controlled complex sentences would help you express comparisons clearly.

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