Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The table represents the total number of people visiting Ashdown museum, and the two pie charts show the outcome of a survey regarding the satisfactory levels of the visitors, before the year of refurbishment and after renovation.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the total number of visitors has shown a dramatic surge after refurbishment. The majority of the visitors were dissatisfied in the year before renovation, while the equal proportion of people who visited the museum felt satisfied after the refurbishment year.

Turning to details, the total number of visitors showed a rapid surge during the year before refurbishment and after it, which was 74,000 to 92,000, respectively. Almost 40% of the people felt dissatisfied visiting the museum before renovation, whereas the equal proportion of the people felt satisfied after the redecoration. The proportion of very satisfied individuals increased from 15% to 35% after the renovation.

Furthermore, the proportion of dissatisfied individuals dropped from 10% to 5%. Almost 5% of visitors gave no response in both the surveys. 30% of visitors felt satisfied before renovation, which increased by 10% after renovation. 15% of individuals were dissatisfied after the refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction improved after refurbishment. Several key figures are also reported accurately, including very satisfied visitors rising from 15% to 35%, and satisfied visitors increasing from 30% to 40%. However, the overview says an “equal proportion” felt satisfied after refurbishment, which is unclear and does not accurately capture the chart’s main pattern: satisfied was the largest group at 40%, while very satisfied was 35%. There is also a significant data error: dissatisfaction fell from 40% to 15%, not from 10% to 5%; those figures refer to very dissatisfied visitors. The response covers the task, but this misreading and the limited comparison of categories keep some features less fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details. The overview helps the reader identify the broad rise in visitor numbers and improvement in satisfaction, while phrases such as “Turning to details” and “Furthermore” signal progression. However, the final paragraph revisits figures already mentioned, and the sequence of satisfaction categories is not consistently clear. In particular, the sentence claiming dissatisfaction dropped from 10% to 5% conflicts with the earlier accurate comparison of dissatisfied visitors, making the reference to categories difficult to follow. Grouping positive responses together and then negative responses, with each category named precisely, would make the comparisons more cohesive and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

You use a reasonably flexible range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “dramatic surge,” “proportion,” “dropped,” and “increased.” These choices generally communicate the comparisons clearly, and the response avoids relying entirely on basic terms. Some wording is less precise or repetitive, however: “surge” is used for the overall visitor increase and again for the figures, while “satisfactory levels” is an awkward way to describe satisfaction. “Equal proportion” is also unclear in context, and “redecoration” does not accurately describe refurbishment. More exact chart language, such as “share of respondents” and “rose by ten percentage points,” would improve precision and collocation. Overall, the vocabulary is sufficient and sometimes effective, though occasional imprecision remains.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

You demonstrate a useful mix of sentence forms, including complex comparisons with “whereas” and a clear overview sentence beginning “Overall, it can be clearly seen…”. Many sentences are grammatically controlled, and the meaning is generally easy to follow. Some errors and awkward constructions remain. For example, “before the year of refurbishment and after renovation” is not a well-formed parallel comparison, and “during the year before refurbishment and after it” would be clearer with matching time phrases. In “which was 74,000 to 92,000,” the relative clause does not attach naturally to the figures; a direct construction such as “rising from 74,000 to 92,000” would be more accurate. Continue varying sentence structures while checking parallel phrasing and clause links.

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