Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished and charts show the result of surveys asking visitors during the same two periods.

Firstly, the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum shows during the year before refurbishment is the number of visitors 74,000. Furthermore, during the year after refurbishment is the number of 92,000.

Secondly, the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction year before refurbishment is very satisfied visitors is 15%, satisfied visitors 30%, dissatisfied visitor 40%, very dissatified visitor 10% and no response visitor 5%. However, the after refurbishment, very satisfied visitor is 35%, satisfied visitors 40%, dissatisfied visitor 15%, very dissatisfied visitor 5% and no response visitor 5%.

In conclusion, total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum are compared to results of surveys of visitor satisfaction after refurbishment 92,000 and before 74,000 in fact, visitors ratio after refubishment is decrease.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You report the main figures accurately: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and the satisfaction percentages for both years are mostly recorded correctly. However, the response does not clearly identify the key overall pattern: satisfaction improved markedly after refurbishment, with the satisfied and very satisfied groups increasing while dissatisfaction fell. The final sentence is especially confusing and says the visitor ratio “is decrease,” which contradicts the increase in visitor numbers. The report is also below the required 150 words; 27 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop a clear overview and explain the main comparisons rather than mainly listing figures to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from visitor numbers to survey results and then to a conclusion. “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “However” signal some relationships between sections. However, the progression is mechanical, and the conclusion repeats earlier figures without drawing a clear overall comparison. The opening largely restates the task, while the two data paragraphs list values with little explanation of how the results relate. Some linking is also awkward: “However, the after refurbishment” does not clearly connect the comparison. A more coherent report would use a brief overview after the introduction, group related satisfaction categories, and use comparisons such as “whereas” or “by contrast” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitor satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” and “no response,” and the reader can generally understand the topic. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or unnatural, such as “the number of visitors … is the number of visitors” and “satisfied visitors.” There are also spelling errors in “dissatified” and “refubishment,” and “visitors ratio” is an unsuitable phrase for this comparison. These choices make the report less precise, even though most figures remain understandable. Aim for concise reporting language and accurate collocations, for example, “visitor numbers increased” and “the proportion of dissatisfied visitors fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the figures are usually presented in a form the reader can follow. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and the limited range makes comparisons difficult to express clearly. For example, “the total number … shows during the year before refurbishment is the number” has an unclear clause structure, while “the after refurbishment” is not a complete grammatical phrase. In the conclusion, “total number … are compared” has subject–verb disagreement, and “visitors ratio after refurbishment is decrease” contains faulty sentence construction. Practise forming direct comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, such as “Visitor numbers increased from 74,000 to 92,000.”

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