Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The table demonstrates how many visitors visited the Ashdown Museum before and after a year when the refurbishment took place, while the pie charts display the visitors' satisfaction over the same time period.

Overall, the number of visitors at Ashdown Museum increased, and the percentage of very satisfied visitors nearly doubled, whereas the individuals who were very dissatisfied decreased to half.

Before refurbishment, the number of visitors were 74000, and this figure rose to 92000 after renovation.

The percentage of satisfied people was 30% and it increased to 40%, the higgest percentage of visitor in the museum after renovation. Around the fifth of the percentage of visitors were very satisfied before refurbishment, which rose to just over double, from 15% to 35%.

In contrast, the figure for very dissatisfed visitors reduced to 15% which was 40% a year before refurbishment. Similarly, the percentage of dissatisfied visitors also fell from 10% to just 5%. However, the people who did not respond remained unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the main changes: visitor numbers rose, satisfaction improved overall, and the share who were very dissatisfied fell. The figures for total visitors and most satisfaction categories are accurately reported, and you compare the two periods rather than listing data in isolation. However, one important category is misreported: dissatisfied visitors fell from 40% to 15%, while very dissatisfied visitors fell from 10% to 5%; your final comparison reverses these labels and figures. Also, “nearly doubled” does not accurately describe the rise in very satisfied visitors from 15% to 35%. Correcting these points and making the overview more precise would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a clear introduction, overview and detail paragraphs, with a logical movement from visitor totals to satisfaction results. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” “Similarly” and “However” help signal comparisons, and the reader can follow the main progression. Some connections are less effective because the final paragraph mislabels the satisfaction categories, making the comparison confusing. The sentence beginning “The percentage of satisfied people” also combines several figures and ideas in a way that could be more clearly separated. Use one sentence per category or group related changes explicitly, and ensure contrast markers reflect the data accurately. This would make the cohesion more consistently controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction,” “percentage,” “increased” and “remained unchanged.” These choices allow you to describe the main trends, and some variation between “rose,” “increased” and “reduced” avoids excessive repetition. However, several word choices or forms are inaccurate: “the higgest percentage” contains a spelling error, “the fifth of the percentage” is an unnatural expression, and “visitors visited” is repetitive. “Very dissatisfied” and “dissatisfied” also need to be used precisely, since they refer to separate chart categories. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling and category labels carefully; this would improve precision without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast structure “whereas” and the relative clause in “which rose to just over double.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparisons, and punctuation generally supports readability. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the number of visitors were 74000” has subject–verb disagreement; “the percentage … was 30% and it increased” would be clearer with a more controlled clause structure; and “Around the fifth of the percentage” is grammatically awkward. There is also an unnecessary space before “before” in the opening sentence. Review agreement with singular subjects such as “number” and “percentage,” and build comparisons in complete, parallel clauses. This would extend the range while improving accuracy.

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