Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The pie chart shows the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they with their visit, during the two periods.

Overall, the number of visitors rose after refurbishment, and and proportion of very satisfied and satisfied also increase after refurbishment.

One the one hand, the number of visitors was 74,000 before refurbishment, which rose upto 92,000 after refurbishment.

On the other hand, surveys show that; 15% people feel very satisfied and 30 percent people feel satisfied before refurbishment. And, 40% people feel dissatisfied and 10% feel very dissatisfied, and 10% people have no response.

However, after refurbishment, 35% people feel very satisfied and 40% people satisfied with Museum. On the other hand, 15%people feel dissatisfied and 5% people very dissatisfied with Museum. However no response remaning same 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers increased from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction improved, with the satisfied categories rising while dissatisfaction fell. Most survey figures are reported accurately. However, the before-refurbishment “No response” figure is 5%, not 10%, and the overview would be stronger if it clearly highlighted the largest shifts, especially the rise in “very satisfied” responses from 15% to 35%. The response is also below the required 150 words: it contains 126 words, with 21 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. This limits how fully you can select and report the key features. Check each figure against the chart and develop the comparisons further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate discussion of visitor numbers and survey results. This helps the reader locate the main information. However, progression is limited: “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” do not establish a clear contrast between the points that follow, and “However” is repeated even where no contrast is needed. The survey figures are mostly listed rather than grouped into a clear comparison between the two years. For stronger organisation, use one paragraph for visitor totals and another comparing satisfaction categories before and after, with linking phrases such as “By contrast” only where appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbished,” “visitors,” “satisfied” and “dissatisfied,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “people feel satisfied” and “people very dissatisfied with Museum.” Some choices also sound unnatural, including “the result of surveys” and “remaning same.” Use concise reporting language and vary the verbs, for example, “accounted for,” “rose” and “fell.” Take care to use accurate forms and collocations so that the survey categories are described clearly and consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main figures can usually be understood. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “how satisfied they with their visit” is missing a verb, while “and and proportion … also increase” has repetition and incorrect verb form. Other problems include “One the one hand,” “15% people,” and “no response remaning same 5%.” Practise accurate sentence patterns such as “The proportion of visitors who were satisfied increased from 30% to 40%.” Check articles, verb forms, agreement and punctuation before submitting.

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