Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The some shows the visitor rose up after the renovation as per pie chart the ratio of satisfied visitors increased Ash down museum 74000 to 92000 because of modification something unique design the museum for tourists before modified the museum was not look that much good but with passage of time government modified and all the tourist attractions was here to this museum and explore the something's new as well earned lots of money from tourist and also captured the beauty of Ash down museum buy the way ther we're lots of historical luggage picture now that museum becoming more famous because renovations

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad direction of two key changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction improved after refurbishment. However, the response only minimally reports the visual information. It does not give the survey percentages or clearly compare the categories; for example, the rise in satisfied and very satisfied responses and the fall in dissatisfied responses are not quantified. Instead, much of the response speculates that the museum became more attractive, famous, and profitable, none of which is shown by the charts. The response is also 47 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise the main features. Focus on the figures and avoid unsupported explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to connect the visitor increase with the improvement in satisfaction, so a central idea can be inferred. However, the response is presented as one long, loosely connected sequence rather than a clear summary with an introduction, overview, and supporting comparisons. Phrases such as “because of modification” and “with passage of time” do not establish clear relationships between the chart data and the later claims. The repeated use of “and” also makes the progression difficult to follow, while references such as “this museum” and “here” are unclear. Separate the main overview from the details, and use short, direct sentences to compare the before-and-after figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “renovation,” “satisfied visitors,” “ratio,” and “historical,” showing an effort to describe the museum and survey. However, the range is basic and several choices are inaccurate or unclear, which sometimes strains understanding. “The some shows” does not communicate a clear meaning, and “historical luggage picture” appears to be an unsuitable description of the chart information. Repetition of “museum,” “tourist,” and “modified” also limits precision. Use standard chart language and choose words that describe measurable changes rather than imagined attractions or objects. More accurate terms such as “proportion,” “visitor numbers,” and “dissatisfied” would make the summary clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to form longer sentences and express cause and change, but sentence structures are very limited in control, and frequent errors make several ideas difficult to understand. For example, “The some shows the visitor rose up” has an unclear subject and incorrect verb construction, while “the museum was not look” uses an incorrect verb form. Agreement and tense are also problematic in “all the tourist attractions was here,” and the response lacks reliable sentence boundaries and punctuation. These errors sometimes distort the intended meaning. Build a few accurate simple sentences first, using past-tense forms such as “visitor numbers rose” and “satisfaction increased,” then add more complex structures once those patterns are secure.

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