Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided table illustrates that the number of tourits to Ashdown Mesum during the year and after it was refurbished.The charts demonstrates the result of asking visitors how much they are impresssed or enjoy their visit during the same two periods.

Now turning the details,Year beforere furbishment in Ashdown museum, the percentage of visitor who are dissatisfied accounted for 40% while the the very less number of visitors gived no response his percentage only 5% and the percentage of vistors who are much satisfied recorded by 15%.The second highest amount of staisfied visitors his percentage almost 30% and the number of very disssatisfied visitors only 10% before the refurbishment.The amount of visitors before the refurbishment 74000 in Ashdown museum.

It is clearly seen that after the refurbishment the proportion of satisfied visitorss 40% and the amount of very satisfied visitors is 35% While the percentage of very satisfied vistors or the percntage of visitors who gave no response are remained same they both can be stand 5% and the percentage of visitores who were dissatisfied for Ashdown museum after the refurbishment recorded only 15% and the numbers of visitors are increased dramatically after the refurbishment reach almost 92000 visitors in Ashdown museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main figures for both periods, including the rise in visitors from 74,000 to 92,000 and the shift in satisfaction responses. The comparisons that dissatisfaction fell from 40% to 15% and satisfaction rose are relevant and supported by the chart. However, there is no clear overview that draws these changes together, and some details are inaccurate or confusing: after refurbishment, the 5% figure applies to “no response,” not very satisfied visitors, which you describe as 35% elsewhere. The response also does not clearly distinguish the two satisfaction categories when summarising the overall change. A concise overview highlighting increased attendance and improved satisfaction, followed by accurate category comparisons, would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a basic overall arrangement: it introduces the visuals, discusses the year before refurbishment, and then moves to the year after. Phrases such as “Now turning the details” and “after the refurbishment” signal these shifts, so the reader can generally follow the comparison. However, the paragraphs are long and the information within them is crowded together, with several figures and categories joined in single sentences. Some linking and reference are unclear, particularly “they both can be stand 5%,” which makes it difficult to identify the categories being compared. Use a separate overview and organise each period’s figures more clearly; connect comparisons directly rather than relying on repeated transition phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “recorded,” and “increased dramatically.” These choices show an effort to describe data rather than simply list it. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “percentage,” “visitors,” and “amount,” and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “much satisfied,” “the very less number,” and “gived no response.” Spelling errors—including “tourits,” “Mesum,” and “disssatisfied”—also make the report less clear and polished. Build a reliable set of expressions for proportions and changes, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example the sentence beginning “It is clearly seen that after the refurbishment…”. However, control is weak: many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, or sentence boundaries. Examples include “The charts demonstrates,” “visitors gived,” and “the percentage … are remained same.” The opening also runs two sentences together without a space after the full stop, while several long sentences are joined without clear punctuation, making relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses. Check subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms, and use full stops to separate distinct data points.

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