Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table below shows the number of yearly visitors visiting the Ashdown Museum before and after the refurbihsment. There is a significant spike in number of visitors that visited Ashdown Museum which is about 18,000 new visitors. The two charts showing different level of visitors satisfection from very satisfied to visitors with no response. The pattern in the chart shows there werea huge number visitores that were dissatisfied before the refurbishment which droped from 40 down to 15 while visitors with no response remained the same. The number of setisfied visitors increased from 30 to 40 a stable incrinment. There is huge positive trend in amount of very setisfied visitors from about 15 right to 35 after refurbishment. There is also a stable decrease in number of dissatisfied visitors. Over all refurbishment of Ashdown Museum has a positive impact on amount of visitors visiting each year according to the trend comparison.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main visitor total accurately, noting its rise from 74,000 to 92,000, and identify the key shift from dissatisfaction towards satisfaction after refurbishment. The figures for very satisfied visitors (15 to 35), satisfied visitors (30 to 40), dissatisfied visitors (40 to 15), and no response (unchanged) are also correctly represented. However, the response does not clearly organise these findings into a concise overview and supporting details, and it repeats the decrease in dissatisfaction. The final claim that refurbishment had a positive impact is relevant, but the comparison could be more precise by noting that the combined satisfied categories rose from 45% to 75%, while the dissatisfied categories fell. This gives a relevant but only partly developed account of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly sensible order: visitor numbers first, then survey results, and finally an overall comment. Linking words such as “while” and “There is also” help connect some comparisons. However, the ideas are presented as one continuous paragraph, so the overview and detailed comparisons are not clearly separated. Progression is also weakened by repetition: the fall in dissatisfied visitors is reported twice, and “There is a significant spike” is followed by a separate sentence that restates what the charts show rather than advancing the comparison. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and details, and group related satisfaction figures together. More precise referencing would also make the relationships between the figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” and “trend,” so the main subject is generally clear. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “significant spike” and “positive trend.” However, several spelling errors—“refurbihsment,” “satisfection,” “visitores,” and “incrinment”—make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “new visitors” suggests additional individual people rather than a higher annual total, and “stable increment” does not describe a simple increase naturally. Choose accurate collocations such as “visitor numbers rose” and “the proportion of satisfied visitors increased,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and clauses linked with “which” and “while,” and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur often enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “There is a significant spike in number of visitors that visited” has an unclear, repetitive clause structure, while “which droped from 40 down to 15” does not maintain consistent tense with the past-period comparison. The sentence beginning “The two charts showing” is a fragment because it lacks a main verb. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and past-tense verbs, and use punctuation to separate the overview from individual comparisons.

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