Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This table illustrate the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during before and after refurbishing of it. While the chart shows that how many visitors are satisfy with there visit in two different period of time.

Overall, before the renovation of museum most of the visitors were dissatisfied but after the refurbishment the dramatic change in dissatisfied percentage visitors.

year before refurbishment, 40% of the visitors were dissatisfied, meanwhile only 30% of them were satisfied but there were some of them who were very satisfied which is around 15%. 10% of them were very dissatisfied and 5% of them have no response.

secondly, after refurbishment the sudden dramatic change in visitor's dissatisfaction were decrease and reached at 15% but only 5% of the visitors were satisfied. Very satisfied ratio reached at 35%. Furthermore, very dissatisfied ere reached at 40% and no response were at 5%. On the other hand during the time before refurbishment total number of visitors visit to museum were 74000 but after refurbishment the number rose up and reached at 92000 visitors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main comparison: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and dissatisfaction fell after refurbishment. You also report several survey figures accurately, including 40% dissatisfied before and 15% after, and 35% very satisfied afterwards. However, the account is only partly reliable: you say that after refurbishment only 5% were satisfied, although the chart shows 40%, and you assign 40% to the very dissatisfied group, which was actually 5%. The overview is also unclear and does not summarise the overall shift towards satisfaction. Select the key trends, check each category against the chart, and state the main changes clearly before giving supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview, and separate discussion of the two periods. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is uneven: the overview is vague, and the final sentence returns to visitor totals after the survey discussion rather than integrating the table comparison earlier. Connectors such as “meanwhile,” “secondly,” and “furthermore” are used mechanically or do not clearly express the relationship between the figures. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise the details in a consistent order, comparing the same satisfaction categories across both years. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow which period each figure describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” “satisfied,” and “rose,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “visitors are satisfy with there visit” and “the dramatic change in dissatisfied percentage visitors” are not natural ways to describe survey results. “Sudden dramatic change” is also repetitive, while “ratio” is less suitable than “percentage” for these figures. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling and word forms. Phrases such as “the proportion of visitors who were dissatisfied fell” would communicate the trend more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to use longer sentences and contrast, for example, “While the chart shows…” and “On the other hand…”, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “This table illustrate,” “before and after refurbishing of it,” and “the sudden dramatic change … were decrease.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Articles and sentence openings are also inconsistent, as in “year before refurbishment” and “secondly.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses. For example: “Before refurbishment, 40% were dissatisfied, compared with 15% afterwards.”

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