Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Introduction

This chart shows the visiter to Asdown Museum during the year before and after during the same two periods.

During the year before refurishment 74000 visiter visit the mesem.

1 Very satisfied

In first year 15% people very satisfy for visit the meseum.

2 Satisfied

In previous year 30% people are satisfy from visit the museum.

3 Dissatisfied

in first year 40% people dissatisfied from visit the meseum.

4 Very dissatisfied

During the year before 10% people very dissatisfied from visit the meseum.

5 No responce

During the before year 5% people gives no any responce about visit the meseum.

During the year after refuribishment

Year after refurbishment 92000 people visit the meseum and this graph shows 5 different catagerious people which visit the meseum after refurbishment.

1 Very satisfy

Aftre refurbishment 35% people wer very satisfy for visit the meseum.

2 Satisfied

After refurbishment 40% people were satisfied for visit the meseum.

3 Dissatisfied

After refurbishment 15% people dissatisfied for visit the meseum.

4 Very dissatisfied

After refurbishment 5% people were very dissaisfied for visit the meseum.

5 No responce

After refurbishment 5% people not give any responce about visit the meseum.

Conclusion

Before refurbishment 15% people very satisfied but after refurbishment it was increesed 20%.before 30% people satisfied but aftes refurbishment it is 10% incresed.Dissatisfied before 40% peole dissatisfied but after it was decresed 25%.

Before 10% people were very dissatisfied but after it was decresed 5% and the 5% people can not give no responce in both year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main figures accurately: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and the satisfaction categories are generally given correctly for both years. You also identify the key shifts, including the rise in very satisfied visitors from 15% to 35% and the fall in dissatisfied visitors from 40% to 15%. However, the response is largely a category-by-category list rather than a clear summary of the most important overall features. It lacks a concise overview highlighting that visitor numbers and positive ratings increased while dissatisfaction declined. Some comparisons are also unclear: saying satisfaction “increased 10%” does not distinguish a percentage-point change from a relative increase. Grouping the main trends and making comparisons more precise would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the topic, describes the two periods, and ends with comparisons. Numbered labels also make it possible to locate each satisfaction category. However, the many short, repetitive entries make the report read like notes rather than a connected summary. The headings “Introduction” and “Conclusion” do not compensate for the lack of a clear overview, and the repeated phrase “After refurbishment” creates mechanical linking. The final paragraph repeats figures already listed instead of synthesising them. Organise the information into a brief introduction and overview, followed by paragraphs comparing positive and negative responses across both years; use linking phrases such as “by contrast” only where they clarify a comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” and “visitors,” so the topic is usually identifiable. However, the range is limited and many phrases are repeated, especially “people … satisfied for visit the museum.” Frequent spelling errors such as “visiter,” “meseum,” “refurishment,” and “responce” reduce accuracy and can make the reader pause. Several word choices and forms are also unnatural, for example “this graph shows 5 different catagerious people” and “gives no any responce.” Use standard chart-reporting collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “the proportion of visitors,” “positive ratings,” and “survey respondents” would help you describe the data without repeating the same basic wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use a simple subject–verb pattern, and the reader can often infer the intended meaning. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “15% people very satisfy for visit,” “people dissatisfied from visit,” and “the 5% people can not give no responce”; these show problems with articles, verb forms, prepositions, and sentence construction. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “people gives” and “it was increesed.” Punctuation is weak, particularly where sentences run together in the conclusion. Practise accurate basic patterns such as “15% of visitors were very satisfied” and “the figure fell to 15%,” then combine them with a few controlled comparison clauses.

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