Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Comparision:

The chart shows the number of visitors to Ashdow museum. In the comparision in one year before and the year after when it was refurbished. And the charts shows the result o surveys in two charts

According to the chart total number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment is about 74,000. After refurbishment, it increased to 92,000. so there was an increasing of 18,000 visitors.

Looking at the second charts, before refurbishment only 15 percent visitors were very satisfied and 30 percent were satisfied.So only 45% were positive. But 40% were dissatisfied. 5% gave no response.

After refurbishment, the result was much better. 35% were satisfied and 40% ere satisfied.So total 75%were positive, which is much higher than before. Only 15% were dissatisfied and 5%were very dissatisfied.And 5% gave no response.

reurbishment had a positive effect. It increased both the number of visitors and the level of satisfaction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction was higher after refurbishment. Most figures are reported accurately, including the 18,000 increase and the unchanged 5% with no response. However, the after-refurbishment figures are mislabelled: 35% were very satisfied and 40% satisfied, whereas you write that both groups were “satisfied.” The response also lacks a clear, well-developed overview and gives limited comparison between the two periods. It is 144 words, below the required 150; the nine words copied from the prompt are excluded from the count. To strengthen the response, add a concise overview and compare the shifts across all satisfaction categories accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, reports visitor totals, compares satisfaction before and after, and ends with a summary. Paragraph breaks help separate the main topics, and “After refurbishment” signals a change in period. However, progression is weakened by the fragmented opening (“In the comparison…” and “And the charts shows…”) and by repetitive transitions such as “Looking at” and “After refurbishment.” Some links between details are unclear, and the final sentence repeats the main point rather than drawing together the key comparisons. Organise the response into a clear introduction, overview, and two detail paragraphs, using linking phrases to show contrasts and changes without relying on the same transition repeatedly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “dissatisfied,” and “positive,” so the reader can follow the main message. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors are noticeable: “Comparision,” “Ashdow,” “reurbishment,” and “increasing of 18,000 visitors.” The repeated use of “chart” and “satisfied” also reduces precision, particularly when distinguishing “very satisfied” from “satisfied.” These errors do not prevent understanding, but they make the report less clear and controlled. Learn the exact category labels from the visual and use more precise reporting language, such as “rose by” for the increase and “share” or “proportion” for survey results.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates its main points through mostly simple sentence patterns, for example, “After refurbishment, it increased to 92,000.” There are attempts to combine ideas, but sentence control is inconsistent. The opening contains fragments (“In the comparison in one year before…” and “And the charts shows…”), while “the charts shows” has subject–verb disagreement. Missing spaces after full stops and inconsistent sentence punctuation also make the text harder to read. The range of structures is limited, and errors recur rather than appearing only occasionally. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and punctuation. For example, combine the opening ideas as: “The table compares visitor numbers before and after refurbishment, while the charts show survey results for both years.”

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