Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided table below delineates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts ilustrate the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Overall, it is evident that after refurbishment the number of visitors rise in the Museum. The pie charts clearly illustrate that after refurbishment the Museum is developed well.

The table illustrate the number of visitors in the Museum and it clearly shows that after refurbishment of museum the Museum obtains 18000 new visitors whereas, the percentage of very satisfied visitors also slightly rose after refurbishment by 20%. In addition, The visitors arrivals in museum who are 30% satisfied before refurbishment this percentage slightly grew by 10% and became 40% after refurbishment.

It's pleasure to see that before refurbishment the tourists has 40% dissatisfaction for museum however, after refurbishment the percentage suddenly dropped by 25% and became 15% of dissatisfaction rate. Therefore, the percentage who are very dissatisfied before refurbishment was slightly decline by 5% after refurbishment and tourists who has no response on the development of museum their percentage is same in both year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main elements of the task and identify the broad improvement after refurbishment: visitor numbers rose, satisfaction increased, and dissatisfaction fell. Several figures are reported accurately, including the rise from 74,000 to 92,000, the increase in satisfied visitors from 30% to 40%, and the fall in dissatisfaction from 40% to 15%. However, the overview is vague: “the Museum is developed well” does not clearly summarise the survey’s main shift from mostly dissatisfied responses to mostly satisfied ones. Some details are also unclear or imprecise, such as calling the 20-point rise in very satisfied visitors “slight” and describing the 18,000 increase as “new visitors.” A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons of visitor numbers and satisfaction categories. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and linking expressions such as “In addition” and “however” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several figures and interpretations are packed into long sentences. The repeated use of “after refurbishment” and “the percentage” also makes the writing feel repetitive, while “Therefore” does not express a clear logical consequence in its sentence. Group the satisfaction results more systematically—for example, compare the positive categories together, then the negative categories—and use clearer references to each survey period.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfaction,” and “dissatisfaction,” so the topic is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “delineates” and “illustrate.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural: “the Museum obtains 18000 new visitors,” “visitors arrivals,” and “the tourists has 40% dissatisfaction for museum” do not express the data naturally. “Developed well” is also too vague for describing the survey results. Spelling errors such as “ilustrate” further reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language, such as “visitor numbers increased” and “the proportion who were very satisfied rose.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “however,” and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction recur. For example, “the number of visitors rise” should use a past-tense verb, while “The table illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement. In “the tourists has 40% dissatisfaction,” the verb does not agree with the subject, and the sentence pattern is not grammatically controlled. Capitalisation is inconsistent, as in “In addition, The visitors.” Some long sentences also need clearer punctuation and structure. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons with complete, parallel clauses.

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