Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Below graphs give us information about how many tourists visited ashdown museum before and after its restoration it also highlights thier level of satisfaction during these periods .Overall dramatical increase in visitors can be seen after its restoration moreover majority of the tourists were really satisfied as compared to time before refurbishment we can clearly see the numerous number of visitors dissatisfaction with thier vsit before refurbishment and how the number surprisingly fell down and trasformed to satisfaction with their visits .

So almost 40 % of the torisits were not happy with their visit before retoration of ashdown museum and 30% were just satisfied with thier visit ,these data provide informations how visitors extreme dissatisfactions also 5 % of them did not feel the need to even provide information on thier visit to ashdown museum.

Year after refurbishment was extremely surprising because 35% of the visitors were very happy with thier visit and 40% of them were also satisfied probably they enjoyed but there also 15% of the visitors were still not happy with the tour to ashdown maybe because they lack the faciltied they expected also about 5 % of tourists were etremely sad and 5 % of them didn't gave any sort of informations .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast in satisfaction: dissatisfaction was highest before refurbishment, while satisfaction was higher afterwards. You also report several survey figures accurately, including 40% dissatisfied before and 35% very satisfied and 40% satisfied after. However, the response does not report the important visitor totals of 74,000 and 92,000, and it gives no clear overview of the overall increase in visitor numbers. Some descriptions are imprecise: “almost 40%” is unnecessary when the figure is exactly 40%, and “majority” overstates the combined satisfied share after refurbishment, which is 75% rather than more than half only if both positive categories are clearly combined. Focus on the key comparisons and present them neutrally, without guessing why visitors felt as they did.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an opening summary to figures for the period before refurbishment and then the period after it. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the opening is an unusually long sentence that combines several ideas, and the progression is weakened by repeated references to visitors’ feelings rather than a clear comparison of the two periods. Linking words such as “moreover,” “so,” and “because” are sometimes used mechanically or do not express a logical relationship. For example, the speculation beginning “probably they enjoyed” interrupts the data report. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and connect figures with precise contrasts such as “by comparison” or “whereas.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary related to the topic, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction,” “dissatisfaction,” and “surprising.” However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to read, as in “thier,” “torisits,” “retoration,” and “faciltied.” Several expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “numerous number of visitors dissatisfaction” and “extremely sad” do not describe survey categories appropriately. In IELTS Task 1, prefer neutral, accurate terms such as “visitors,” “satisfied,” and “dissatisfied,” and avoid emotional or speculative wording. Proofreading spelling and learning common collocations for describing percentages would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not consistently controlled. The opening runs several clauses together, while “because there also 15% of the visitors were still not happy” is missing a grammatical structure such as “there were.” Other examples include “30% were just satisfied with their visit” after a sentence fragment and “5% of them didn't gave,” where the verb form after “didn’t” is incorrect. Articles and sentence punctuation are also inconsistent. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking subject–verb structure, verb forms, and punctuation.

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