Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The data displays the amount of people visit to Ashdown Museum and describe their satisfaction first and after the refurbished.

Overall, the number of pleased people is increased double than before however, dissatifaction is decline but the amount of individuals, who did not response is same as before.

After rebuilt the Museum, people are very happy and pleased. The amount of visitors is huge increased also dissatisfaction is less comapre to before renovation.

Before reconstruction, People find the Museum very attractive but the amount of visitors, who are not happy with the experience are more than happier ones. People who are very dissatified are also more than half but the individuals, who did not responded are same as compare to renovation. As a result, After the renovation of the Museum there is a good increase in visitors upto 18%. So, it is increase in visitors happiness after the rebuilt of the Museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad direction of change: visitor numbers rose after refurbishment, satisfaction improved, and the no-response share stayed the same. However, the report only partially presents the chart’s key information. It gives no actual figures for visitor totals or satisfaction categories, and “increased double” is inaccurate: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while the combined satisfied/very satisfied share rose from 45% to 75%, not doubled. The claim that very dissatisfied visitors were “more than half” is also incorrect; this group fell from 10% to 5%. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons of the main categories would make the response more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic overall sequence, moving from a general statement to comments about the periods before and after refurbishment. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear, purposeful paragraphs, and the progression is difficult to follow. Several points are repeated, such as the increase in visitors and happiness, while the discussion shifts between visitor totals and satisfaction without a clear comparison structure. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “After rebuilt,” and “As a result” are attempted, but some do not show a logical relationship between the information that follows. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and paragraphs comparing the figures before and after; use references and connectors to make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt relevant vocabulary, including “satisfaction,” “dissatisfaction,” “refurbished,” and “reconstruction,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For example, “the amount of people visit” and “the amount of visitors is huge increased” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “pleased people” is also imprecise for survey categories. Spelling errors such as “dissatifaction,” “comapre,” and “dissatified” further reduce accuracy. Build a small set of precise chart-reporting phrases, such as “the proportion of visitors who were satisfied,” “visitor numbers rose,” and “the share reporting dissatisfaction fell,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “however” and a relative clause beginning “who did not response,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For instance, “people visit to Ashdown Museum” needs a correctly formed clause, while “the number of pleased people is increased” uses an incorrect verb pattern and tense. In “the amount of visitors is huge increased,” the adverb and verb form are also faulty. Capitalisation after commas is inconsistent, and some sentences join ideas without clear punctuation. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “Visitor numbers rose, while dissatisfaction fell.”

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