Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates the number of satisfied visitor to the Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment. Overall, the number of visitors to the museum has gradually rised after renovation. The count of extermely satisfied visitors has increased significantly after refurbishment whereas, very dissatified people have also escalated.

Prior to refurbishment, most of the tourists of the museum we dissatisfied, comprising 30% very dissatisfied out of 70%. Remaining 30% includes 10% satisfied, 15% ver satisfied and 5% were neutral and 40% were little bit the count of dissatisfied persons was highest which was 40% of the total visitors. very satisfied person

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the broad increase in visitor numbers and attempts to compare satisfaction before and after refurbishment, but it does not accurately report the key survey figures. For example, it says that 30% were “very dissatisfied” before refurbishment, whereas the chart shows 10%; it also describes the 40% dissatisfied group unclearly and gives several other percentages in a confusing sequence. The overview claims that very dissatisfied visitors “have also escalated,” although their share fell from 10% to 5%. The after-refurbishment survey is not meaningfully described, so the main contrast—satisfaction rising while dissatisfaction declined—is missed. The response is also 49 words below the required minimum, leaving the task substantially incomplete. Select the main trends, report accurate comparisons, and develop both periods.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening statement, an overview signalled by “Overall,” and a paragraph beginning “Prior to refurbishment.” However, the information does not progress clearly from the overall picture to a reliable comparison of the two periods. The second paragraph becomes difficult to follow as figures are listed without clear relationships, and it ends with the unfinished phrase “very satisfied person.” Linking is limited, while “whereas” is used in a sentence whose comparison is unclear. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the before-and-after details, and group related figures—for example, satisfied categories together and dissatisfied categories together. Clear references to each year would also help readers follow the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “refurbishment,” “comprising,” “increased significantly,” and “count.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, or form errors make the meaning harder to understand: “extermely,” “dissatified,” and “ver satisfied” are misspelled, while “satisfied visitor” and “escalated” are not natural choices in this context. “Neutral” is also less precise than the chart’s “no response.” These issues are noticeable, although the general topic remains recognisable. Build a small bank of accurate survey terms such as “share,” “proportion,” “respondents,” and “reported satisfaction,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few different sentence patterns, including a complex comparison with “whereas” and a clause introduced by “comprising.” Some basic sentence structures are understandable, but errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence completion occur often enough to affect clarity. For instance, “the number of satisfied visitor” has a singular-plural mismatch, and “the number of visitors … has gradually rised” combines an incorrect verb form with an awkward tense choice. The long sentence beginning “Remaining 30% includes” is not grammatically controlled, and the final words “very satisfied person” form an incomplete sentence. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then add subordinate clauses; proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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