Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table below provides the information of total number of visitors to visited to a museam called Ashdown Museam.while, The charts, illustrate the results of surveys satisfaction which has been given by visitors.

Overall, The highest number of visitors visited to the museam during the year after refurbishment whereas, a significant number of visitors visited the musuem during the year before refurbishment.Another noticeable thing is that, the highest figure given by visitor was satisfied year after refurbishment.But, the year before refurbishment was mostly given dissatisfied.

Most visitor came during the year after refurbishment of the musueam which is 92000.Although the year before refurbishment it was 74000.In the pie charts, most dissatisfied came when the museam was not refurbished with 40% However, the figure converted to satisfied when the musuem run through refurbishment with 40%

The year when it was before refurbishment 30% of visitor was satisfied but after refurbishment 15% of visitor was dissatisfied.Furthermore, 15% of visitor was given very satisfied as their feedback when it was before refurbishment but after refurbishment it increased to 35%. Adding more, 10% of visitor was very dissatisfied before refurbishment however, after refurbishment the rate of very dissatisfied decreased and came to 5%.

Finally, the last option no response remain unchanged with only 5% of visitor who did not given any responsen during both time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the key information and give a clear overview: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and dissatisfaction was most common before refurbishment while satisfaction became more prominent afterwards. The figures you report for the survey categories are accurate, including the unchanged 5% with no response. This gives the response a well-supported account of the main changes. To make the reporting more precise, distinguish the two positive categories in the overview: after refurbishment, 40% were satisfied and 35% very satisfied, rather than describing the highest figure simply as “satisfied.” Also avoid the vague claim that a “significant number” visited before refurbishment when the exact comparison is available. A sharper overview would foreground the rise in visitors and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to visitor totals and survey details, with a final sentence on the unchanged no-response figure. This helps the reader follow the broad comparison. However, links between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear: repeated “However,” “Furthermore,” and “Adding more” do not always show the precise relationship between the figures. The second paragraph also combines visitor totals with survey results, while later paragraphs revisit categories in a less systematic order. Grouping the data into positive responses, negative responses, and no response would create clearer progression. Check referencing as well: “the highest figure given by visitor” is not immediately clear about which survey category it refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “refurbishment,” “survey,” “dissatisfied,” and “increased,” so the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, the range and control are limited by repeated wording and inaccurate collocations, including “visitors visited to,” “figure converted to satisfied,” and “given by visitor.” Spelling errors such as “museam” and “musueam” are noticeable, and “responsen” also reduces polish. Use concise, conventional language for chart reporting: visitors “rose” or “increased,” while survey respondents “reported” satisfaction. Varying “visitor” with “respondent” where appropriate, and using the exact category labels consistently, would make the account more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “Although” and “however,” but control is uneven and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “Although the year before refurbishment it was 74000” is an incomplete clause; write “The figure was 74,000 before refurbishment, compared with 92,000 afterwards.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “30% of visitor was satisfied” and “Finally, the last option no response remain unchanged.” Capitalisation after commas and full stops is inconsistent, and several commas interrupt the sentence structure. Practise complete comparative sentences and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation before submitting.

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