Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chat illustrates the information regarding the before and after renovation of ashdown museum in total amount of tourists. The numbers are measured in percentage

Overall, it is clear that the visitors are more satisfied after refurbishments as well as they are less dissatisfied after renovation of museum. The numbers of visitors are increase by 18000 after renovation

The year before refurbishment People are satisfied at 30 % however it is rise around 10 % after renovation . Although,visitors have no response before and after refurbishment of museum remained unchanged at only 5 %. Tourists who are verydissatisfied fall it's proportion at 5 %

On the other hand, number of visitors have immensely difference in dissatisfied the rate of this percentage had fall around 25 % , before refurbishment it is percentage is 40 % and after it is only 15 %. Nevertheless, tourists are very satisfied after renovation at 20 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, satisfaction improved, and dissatisfaction declined. Several survey figures are also reported accurately, including unchanged non-response at 5% and dissatisfaction falling from 40% to 15%. However, the account is only partly complete: it omits the 15% who were very satisfied before refurbishment and gives the after-refurbishment figure as “20%” rather than 35%. The claim that satisfaction rose “around 10%” is also imprecise: the satisfied category increased from 30% to 40%, while very satisfied rose by 20 percentage points. A clearer, more accurate summary of the key categories would make the response more fully address the visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview, and paragraphs describing survey results. The overview usefully signals the broad movement towards greater satisfaction, and phrases such as “On the other hand” attempt to connect contrasting information. However, progression is not consistently clear: visitor totals, satisfaction categories, and dissatisfaction figures are mixed without a systematic order. Some links are awkward or misleading, such as “Although” before the unchanged no-response figure and “Nevertheless” before the very-satisfied result. Group the figures by positive and negative responses, and use straightforward comparisons to guide the reader through each category.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” “proportion,” and “percentage.” However, the range and control are limited, with repeated use of “renovation” and “visitors” and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions. “Pie chat” misidentifies the visual, while “immensely difference” and “fall it's proportion” make parts of the comparison difficult to understand. Spelling and word formation also need attention, as in “verydissatisfied” and “amount of tourists.” Choose precise chart language and natural collocations; for example, describe the figures as percentages of respondents and say that a category’s share “fell” or “increased.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some complex sentences, including “Although, visitors have no response…” and “On the other hand…,” but these structures are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in “The numbers of visitors are increase” and “the rate … had fall.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, and several clauses lack clear grammatical connections, as in “before refurbishment it is percentage is 40%.” Articles and sentence construction need more reliable control. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them with accurate contrast clauses. This would reduce the frequent errors that sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow.

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