Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The data provided in the form of table and charts illustrates the results obtained from the surveys conducted by Ashdown Museum.

Two surveys were conducted with a gap of one year. Survey was conducted before and after refurbishment.

The number of visitors to the Ashdown Museum increased in the following year after refurbishment from 74,000 to 92,000. Overall it attracted more positive feedback in the survey after refurbishment than before.

The satisfaction level increased from 45% to 75% including the results from very satisfied and satisfied.

The data shows that the change in percentage of dissatisfied visitors is the biggest (25%) transition in the data, moving from 40% to 15%. After that a significant change was noticed in percentage of very satisfied visitors which was 20%, seen after refurbishment.

One field remained same before and after refurbishment which is "no response", and it was given by 5% of the visitors. The percentage of very dissatisfied visitors changed from 10% to 5% after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You identify the main overall changes accurately: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and positive satisfaction increased after refurbishment. The combined satisfied and very satisfied figures are correctly summarised as rising from 45% to 75%. You also report the largest shift in dissatisfaction, the unchanged 5% giving no response, and the fall in very dissatisfied visitors. This gives a clear, relevant account of the key features. To make the report more fully developed, include the individual satisfied figures (30% to 40%) and clarify that the 25-point fall in dissatisfied responses is a percentage-point change. The opening description of the surveys is somewhat repetitive and contributes less than a concise overview of the main patterns would.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the visuals, gives the visitor totals and broad overview, then reports satisfaction changes. Paragraphing helps separate the information, and phrases such as “after refurbishment” keep the time periods identifiable. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, with repeated references to “the data” and “after refurbishment,” and the second paragraph repeats that surveys took place before and after refurbishment without adding much. Some links between details are also imprecise: “After that” suggests a sequence or ranking that is not clearly explained. Grouping the positive responses together, then the negative responses, would create a smoother comparison and make the organisation more purposeful.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “satisfaction level,” “positive feedback,” “dissatisfied visitors,” and “percentage.” These choices communicate the comparisons clearly, and “refurbishment” is used appropriately throughout. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “illustrates” and “significant change.” Some phrasing is less natural or precise, however: “the biggest transition in the data” is not a suitable collocation for a change in survey results, and “one field remained same” is awkward. “Results obtained from the surveys” is also wordier than necessary. More precise terms such as “largest decrease,” “category,” and “remained unchanged” would improve fluency and accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple statements and more developed structures, and most of the information remains easy to understand. The sentence beginning “The data shows that…” successfully introduces a comparison, while “which was 20%, seen after refurbishment” attempts to add detail. Some grammatical errors remain, though. In “Two surveys were conducted with a gap of one year,” the time relationship is unclear; “a year apart” would be more direct. “Survey was conducted” needs an article or plural form, and “one field remained same” is missing “the.” The final sentence also has an awkward passive construction. Aim for consistently complete noun phrases and clearer sentence structures when adding explanatory clauses.

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