Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbised.The chart shows the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit,during the same two periods.The first table shows the total number of visitors to ashdown museum the first step shows the number of visitors to ashdown museum during the yesr before refurbishment is 74000 and the second step shows the number of visitors to ashdown museum duing the year after refurbishment is 92000.The an other table shos the results of surveys of visitors satisfaction.First of all shows the year before refurbishment the very stasfied is 15% and satisfied 30% and Dissatisfied 40% and very dissatisfied is 10% and the last option is No response is upto 5% and the yesr after refurbishment is very satisfied 35% and satisfied is 40% and dissatisfied is 15% and the last one is very dissatisfied and the last option is No response upto 5% and 5% respectively.The results of surveys of visitors satisfaction year before refurbishment and the year after refurbisment is to make relevent comparisons.So, The very satisfied is high ratio in after refurbishment as compared to year before refurbishment and the satisfied ratio is high in year after refurbishment and the dissatisfied is less than year before refurbishment and its very dissatisfied is less than year before refurbishment and the last option in both side thats No response is equal in both sides.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You report the key figures accurately: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and the satisfaction percentages are correctly given for both years. You also identify the main pattern—that positive ratings increased while dissatisfaction fell, with no response unchanged. This addresses the task and gives a relevant overview. However, the overview is delayed until the end and is repeated rather than clearly summarised near the beginning. Some details are less fully explained: for example, you could group the two positive categories and compare their combined share with the two negative categories, making the scale of the change clearer. The opening repeats the task wording and the visitor totals several times instead of selecting the most significant features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response contains relevant information about both the visitor totals and survey results, and the reader can follow the broad before-and-after comparison. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs or a consistent progression. The opening repeats the task description and visitor figures, while the final sentences restate comparisons already listed. Linking phrases such as “First of all” and “So” do not clearly show how the information is organised, and “the first step” and “the second step” are unclear references. Group the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and a paragraph comparing the figures; use linking words only where they clarify the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfied,” and “dissatisfied,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “the last option” and “the year before refurbishment.” Some word choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the first step shows” for a table entry and “high ratio” for a higher percentage. Spelling errors—including “refurbised,” “stasfied,” and “relevent”—also reduce precision. Use a wider set of accurate reporting terms and vary how you describe the categories and changes; this would make the account more concise and easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report several figures in connected sentences, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined by “and,” with little accurate variety. Some sentences lack a clear grammatical structure, as in “First of all shows the year before refurbishment,” and the long sentence listing the survey results is difficult to control. There are also errors in articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation: for example, “The table shows … refurbised.The chart shows” has no space after the full stop, and commas are often missing between clauses. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use full stops to separate the data for each year.

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