Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two pie charts illustrate the result of visitors satisfaction before the year of refurbishment and after the year of refurbishment.

Overall the noticable trend is that visitors was quite satisfied after the refurbishment , on the other hand visitors in majority were dissatisfied before the refurbishment.

About 74,000 people visit Ashdown's museum in the year before the refurbishment, a significant amount of visitor surveys on dissatisfied option about 40% and about 10% visitors were very dissatisfied on the other hand about 15% was visitors were very satisfied and a small proportion did not response during the year before the refurbishment.

92,000 vistors in total visit Ashdown museum after the refurbishment the proportion of part dissatisfied had a dramatic change decrease from 40% to 15%, wheares proportion of satisfied visitors has significant channge from 15% to 35% only quite of vistor didn't response to survey.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the overall shift from dissatisfaction before refurbishment to greater satisfaction afterwards, and you include the visitor totals of 74,000 and 92,000. Several key figures are also accurate, including dissatisfaction falling from 40% to 15% and very satisfied responses rising from 15% to 35%. However, the account is only partial: it does not report the 30% satisfied figure before refurbishment or the 40% satisfied figure afterwards, and it omits the after-period’s 5% very dissatisfied result. The statement that visitors were “quite satisfied” afterwards is not fully supported without distinguishing the satisfied categories. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Include the main categories consistently and make the overview more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and details for the two periods. The contrast signalled by “Overall” and “on the other hand” helps readers follow the main change. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven, and several figures are crowded into long sentences, making comparisons harder to track. The final sentence combines visitor totals, a decrease, an increase, and non-response without clear separation. Some linking phrases are also repetitive or awkwardly connected. Organise the details in a consistent order—for example, report each period’s satisfaction categories together—and use shorter sentences with clear comparisons to improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “dissatisfied,” “dramatic change,” and “significant,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “the result of visitors satisfaction,” “a significant amount of visitor surveys,” and “did not response.” Spelling errors, including “noticable,” “vistors,” “wheares,” and “channge,” are noticeable and reduce precision. Some phrases are also repetitive, particularly “before the refurbishment” and “after the refurbishment.” Build a more accurate set of chart-reporting expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast between the two periods, but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “visitors was quite satisfied,” “people visit,” and “proportion … has significant change.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also problematic: the overview joins contrasting ideas with a comma, while the final sentence runs several comparisons together. Articles and plural forms are sometimes missing or inaccurate. These errors can make relationships between the figures difficult to follow. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, then divide complex comparisons into complete, clearly punctuated sentences.

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