Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The tabular data provides information about the total number of visitors to the Ashdown museum before refurbishment and after after refurbishment;however, the circular chart gives infirmation about the result of surveys of visitors satisfaction.

Overall,it is evident that the total number of visitors were increased after redevelopment of Ashdown museum.Whereas, after refurbishment the visitors who were satisfied were increased.

To begin with, there were a 74000 visitors in the museum during the year before refurbishment,but the number of visitors were growing during the year after refurbishment to 92000.However, there was a 40 percent visitors who were dissatisfied before refurbishment,but after reconstruction of museum the numbers converted into satisfied visitors.Also,30 percent visitors who were satisfied and a half visitors who were very satisfied before refurbishment,but after redevelopment the visitors who very satisfied were doubled and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main increase in visitor numbers, from 74,000 to 92,000, and note that satisfaction improved after refurbishment. However, the response only partially reports the survey results: it mentions the 40% dissatisfied before refurbishment and the 30% satisfied, but does not accurately complete the comparison. In particular, “a half visitors who were very satisfied” is not supported by the chart; the figure was 15%, not 50%. The after-refurbishment figures for satisfied and dissatisfied visitors are also not clearly stated, and the final sentence is unfinished. The response is 16 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the limited coverage. Include a concise overview and report the key shifts accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then details. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “To begin with,” and “However” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is weakened by unclear or incomplete comparisons, and the response ends mid-sentence at “were doubled and”. Some connectors are also used awkwardly, such as “Whereas” starting a sentence without a complete contrasting clause. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and connect each before-and-after figure directly. This would make the information easier to follow and reduce the impression of a list of loosely connected points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “total number of visitors,” “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” and “satisfied.” There is also an attempt to vary wording with “redevelopment” and “reconstruction.” However, several choices are inaccurate or repetitive: “circular chart” is less suitable than “pie chart,” and “converted into satisfied visitors” does not clearly describe a change in survey percentages. “Infirmation” is a spelling error, while repeated use of “visitors” and “after refurbishment” limits flexibility. Choose precise terms for proportions and survey categories, such as “the proportion of dissatisfied respondents fell.” Check spelling and use chart vocabulary consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Whereas” and a clause beginning “who were dissatisfied.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make the comparisons difficult to interpret. Examples include “the total number of visitors were increased,” where the singular subject requires a singular verb, and “there were a 74000 visitors,” which has an incorrect article and plural construction. “The visitors who very satisfied were doubled” is missing a verb form, and the opening sentence contains faulty punctuation around “however.” Aim first for accurate, complete sentences with correct subject–verb agreement and articles, then add more complex structures. Proofread sentence endings and punctuation.

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