Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrate the number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished , and the pie chart elucidate the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods .

In anoverview the highest number of visitors to ashdown museum in table after refurbishment and the lowest before refurbishment . As well as in the pie chart the highest results of surveys of visitor satisfaction before refurbishment is dissatisfied and the lowest in no response . However the highest result of after refurbishment is satisfied and lowest is very satisfied and no response is same same .

First and foremost in the table the total number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment is 74000 , and during the year after refurbishment total number of visitors to ashdown museum is 92000.

As well as in the pie chart results of surveys of visitor satisfaction before refurbishment very satisfied is 15% and satoisfied is 30% . Additionally the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction dissatisfied is 40% , and very dissatisfied is 10% . at least the results of surveys of visitors satisfaction no response is 5%. Furthermore after refurbishment the results of surveys of visitors very satisfied is 35% , and satisfied is 40% . However the result of survey of visitors dissatisfied is 15% . At least but not last the result of very dissatisfied is 5% . At the end of the result of no response is 5% same with very dissatisfied.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main figures accurately: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and the satisfaction percentages are generally correct for both periods. You also identify the broad shift from dissatisfaction before refurbishment to greater satisfaction afterwards. However, the overview is not fully clear: saying the highest result after refurbishment was “satisfied” overlooks that this was the largest category, while “lowest is very satisfied and no response is same same” is inaccurate because very satisfied was 35%, not the lowest. The response mainly lists figures rather than selecting and comparing the most important changes. Develop the overview around the rise in visitor numbers and the marked movement from dissatisfied to satisfied responses, and make the category comparisons explicit. (43 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, an overview and separate paragraphs for the table and survey data. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression is weakened by repetitive sequencing phrases such as “As well as,” “Furthermore,” “At least,” and “At the end,” some of which do not express the intended relationship. The overview also combines several points in a confusing sentence, particularly “the highest result of after refurbishment is satisfied and lowest is very satisfied and no response is same same.” Group the survey results by period or by positive and negative responses, and use a small number of accurate links such as “by contrast” and “while” to make comparisons clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitor satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” and “total number of visitors,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “results of surveys of visitor satisfaction.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the pie chart elucidate” and “the highest results … is dissatisfied.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “satoisfied” and “anoverview,” which reduce precision. Use concise reporting language and vary the terms for the categories and figures; for example, describe the proportions as “the share of satisfied visitors” and say that dissatisfaction “fell” after the refurbishment.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most information can be understood, and you attempt longer sentences using connectors such as “and,” “however,” and “as well as.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence formation and agreement. For example, “The table illustrate” needs a plural subject with a singular verb (“The table illustrates”), while “the highest number … and the lowest before refurbishment” is an incomplete comparison. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in anoverview” and the spaces before commas and full stops. Build clearer sentences with a subject and verb for each comparison, and check agreement, articles and sentence boundaries when editing.

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