Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table given below shows the number of vistors Ashdown Museum during thr year before and the year after it was refurbished.

Looking from an overall perspective it is crystal clear that the the table below depicts the number of vistor to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after refurbishmet and the pie chart given given the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit , during same two period.

In the table, that is given above the pie chat shows that there are total 74000 visitors during the year before refurbishment and 92000 visitors during the year of after refurbishment.

And the pie chart given below depicts the satisfaction of visitors befor and after refurbishment the people that were very satisfied before refurbishment was 15% but after refurbishment it was 36% also the people who was dissatisfied before refurbishment was now less in number after refurbishment. So it is clear that, people are more satisfied after refurbishment was done.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main subject and report the visitor totals accurately: attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000. You also recognise the broad improvement in satisfaction after refurbishment. However, the response is under the required 150 words (133 words; 31 words copied from the prompt are excluded), and the survey data are only partly reported. The text gives 15% as the pre-refurbishment “very satisfied” figure, but says 36% afterwards rather than the chart’s 35%; it does not report the 30% and 40% satisfied figures or the changes in very dissatisfied and no-response responses. The overview is repetitive rather than a concise summary of the key contrasts. Include the main satisfaction categories and accurate figures to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to visitor totals and then survey results, so the reader can identify the broad topic. However, there is no clear paragraphing, and the progression is weakened by repeating the task description in the second sentence: “the table below depicts” the visitor numbers and the pie chart gives survey results. Linking is also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “And” and “So.” Some references are unclear, as in “the pie chart given below” and “the people that were very satisfied.” Organise the response into a brief introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing the figures, using clear references and fewer repetitive connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfied,” and “dissatisfied,” and the general meaning is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “given below,” “given above,” and “less in number.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “vistors,” “thr,” “vistor,” “refurbishmet,” and “befor,” which reduce accuracy and can distract the reader. “Pie chart” is also not the most precise description of the displayed survey charts. Build a more varied set of terms for describing proportions and changes, and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses basic past-tense forms, for example, “there are total 74000 visitors” and “people are more satisfied after refurbishment was done.” However, complex sentence attempts are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to follow. Examples include the repeated article in “the the table,” the incomplete construction “the people that were very satisfied before refurbishment was 15%,” and the unclear clause “the people who was dissatisfied.” Subject–verb agreement, sentence boundaries, and article use need attention. Practise writing shorter, complete comparisons first, then combine them with accurate clauses and punctuation.

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